自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: answer the question directly with correct tense, use a topic sentence, then one or two supporting details. Avoid short fragments and repetition. Use linking words like “so” or “and” to connect ideas and correct verb forms (use past tense for past events).

示例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me when I was seven, and I practiced riding it every afternoon until I felt confident. As a result, I learned to ride without training wheels in a few weeks.

建议: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific, organized reasons. Use linking words (for example, “because,” “also,” “for instance”) and avoid fillers like “uh” and repetitions. Use plural forms and smooth phrasing (e.g., “bikes are popular”). Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, in my neighborhood groups of young people gather every afternoon to practice riding and cycle together, which shows how common biking is.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use the past tense. Using present tense ('do have') mismatches the time frame. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference; use 'had' for past possession.

× When I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

This fragment lacks a main verb and does not form a complete sentence. Combine it with a clause that contains the verb to make a complete sentence. Suggestion: attach it to a main clause or add a verb, e.g., 'When I was a child, I had a bike.'

× My mom bought me a bike when I was still 7 years old and at that time I practiced to ride a bike.

✓ My mom bought me a bike when I was seven years old, and at that time I practiced riding a bike.

Use past simple 'bought' is correct, but 'practiced to ride' is unidiomatic in English. After 'practice' we use the gerund ('riding') not 'to' plus infinitive. Also write numbers under ten as words for formality. Suggestion: use 'practiced riding a bike' to express repeated action in the past.

× I think yes, bike is very popular in our country because, uh, back when I was still a child, I saw many young people who are uh, learning, learning how to ride a bike.

✓ I think yes, bikes are very popular in our country because, back when I was a child, I saw many young people learning how to ride bikes.

Several issues: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are' to agree with the general statement (singular/plural and present tense); 'back when I was still a child' mixes past and present markers—'when I was a child' is sufficient; 'who are learning, learning how to ride a bike' is repetitive and mixes present progressive with a past observation—use simple past observation 'I saw many young people learning' or 'I used to see many young people learning'. Suggestion: use plural subject and consistent tense: 'bikes are' and 'I saw many young people learning how to ride bikes.'

× And also they are like every afternoon they are having a line or they are together.

✓ Also, every afternoon they would line up or gather together.

The original has awkward filler ('are like') and incorrect continuous tense ('are having a line') for a habitual past action. Use a past habitual expression: 'would line up' or 'used to line up' and 'gather together.' Suggestion: avoid fillers, use appropriate verbs ('line up', 'gather'), and match tense to habitual actions in the past.