自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, accurate and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid irrelevant phrases like “Thank you.” Give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘bought’ not ‘boarded’) and verb forms (use past tense consistently).

示例: Yes, I did. My mother bought a small red bicycle for me when I was six, and I used it to ride to school and around the neighborhood. Because it was sturdy and comfortable, I learned to ride quickly and spent most afternoons cycling with my friends.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (plural forms and articles), and add specific supporting reasons with linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., ‘popular’, ‘eco-friendly’, ‘transportation’, ‘more convenient’). Avoid vague phrases and correct pronoun/verb agreement.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. For example, more people choose cycling because it is eco-friendly and cheaper than driving. Moreover, with new bike lanes and bike-share schemes, cycling has become a convenient and healthy alternative to cars and public transport.

× The bike was boarded by my mother and and it is very nice.

✓ The bike was bought by my mother, and it was very nice.

The student used 'boarded' incorrectly; the intended verb is 'bought' (past participle of 'buy'). Also maintain past narrative tense: 'it is very nice' should be 'it was very nice' to match 'I had a bike when I was a child.' Suggestion: use correct past participle verbs and keep verb tenses consistent within the same time frame.

× Yes, I do think bike are popular in my country as the way that we're leaving is becoming more eco friendly.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country as the way that we're living is becoming more eco-friendly.

'Bike are' is incorrect because the plural noun 'bikes' requires agreement with the plural form; use 'bikes are'. Also 'we're leaving' is wrong verb choice and spelling for the intended meaning; use 'we're living' to refer to lifestyle. Finally, 'eco friendly' should be hyphenated as 'eco-friendly' when used as an adjective before a noun. Suggestion: ensure noun plurality matches verb form and choose the correct verb ('live' vs 'leave').

× Bike is a better transport than cars or the public transport.

✓ Bikes are better transport than cars or public transport.

The sentence uses singular 'Bike is' while comparing categories; use plural 'Bikes are'. Also 'the public transport' is unnatural; use 'public transport' without 'the'. 'Transport' can be uncountable here. Suggestion: when making general statements about types of vehicles, use the plural noun and omit unnecessary articles.