自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more accurate and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and avoid fillers. Add one specific detail (when, where, or what kind of bike) and use one linking word if you add extra information. Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small red bike with training wheels that I used to ride around my neighborhood. Because my parents lived near a park, I often went there to practise cycling every weekend.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary, avoid repetition and hesitations, and support your opinion with 2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Conclude briefly. Keep answers concise and coherent.

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in China because they are convenient and inexpensive. For example, many people use bikes to commute short distances and to avoid traffic. In addition, shared bike services make cycling even more accessible in cities.

× Yeah, I had a bike when I'm child, uh, when I was child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The speaker mixed past and present tense: 'I had' is past, so the time clause must also be past. Use 'when I was a child' (past simple) and include the article 'a' before 'child.' To improve, keep tense consistent in time clauses and remember to use articles with singular countable nouns.

× And, uh, I really like biking.

✓ And, uh, I really liked biking.

The speaker is describing a past habit linked to childhood, so past simple 'liked' is appropriate instead of present 'like.' For clarity, match the verb tense to the time frame being described (past for past habits).

× Yeah, specs are very popular, are pretty popular in my country in China, 'cause it's very convenient.

✓ Yeah, bikes are very popular in my country, because they're very convenient.

The student likely said 'specs' incorrectly; the correct noun is 'bikes.' Also 'it’s' (singular) should be 'they're' to agree with the plural subject 'bikes.' Ensure noun choice is accurate and maintain subject-verb number agreement.

× It can go basically everywhere.

✓ They can go basically everywhere.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural). Use 'they' and 'can' to agree with the plural subject. Always ensure pronouns match the number of their antecedents.

× it's cheap and affordable for people to buy it uh, compared to a car

✓ they're cheap and affordable for people to buy compared to a car

Replace 'it' with 'they' to match 'bikes.' Also remove the unnecessary 'to' before 'buy' when using the infinitive without an object, but better: 'affordable for people to buy' is acceptable; keep concise: 'affordable for people to buy compared to cars' or 'compared to a car.' Ensure prepositions and reference nouns agree in number.

× and uh it's yeah, it's like, I think it's more effective than.

✓ and I think they're more practical than cars.

The original sentence is fragmented and ends with an incomplete comparison ('more effective than' what?). Provide a clear comparative object ('cars') and a single coherent clause. Replace vague 'effective' with a more natural adjective like 'practical' if meaning convenience and cost-effectiveness are intended. Maintain complete sentence structure and finish comparisons.