分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 内容自然、答题直接且有例子，但可更简洁并增加连接词以改善连贯性。注意避免重复“share”过多，可用同义表达。句子总数可控制在3-4句内。

示例: Yes. My mother and elder brother always encouraged us to share toys and food, which taught me to be generous. As a result, I often bring snacks to class or offer items to roommates, because small acts like these help build friendships.

建议: 回答清晰且有具体例子，但句子衔接处略显简单，注意主从句合并与时态一致（例如 'send' 应为 'send' 或 'have sent' 视语境）。可用连接词如 'such as'、'and' 或 'which' 改善流畅度。

示例: I usually share small everyday things, such as snacks, book recommendations and funny videos, because these gestures can lift people’s mood and strengthen our friendships.

建议: 观点明确且例证恰当，但存在少量语法问题（如 'to other' 应为 'to others'，'hurt others feeling' 应为 'hurt others' feelings'）。可以将例子合并成更流畅的句子并使用连接词如 'for instance'。

示例: I wouldn’t share highly personal items, for instance passports or bank details, because they could lead to identity theft or financial loss. Also, I wouldn’t reveal secrets I promised to keep, as that would hurt others’ feelings.

建议: 回答具体生动，逻辑清晰，但可稍微压缩句子并加入连接词如 'so' 或 'therefore' 以强化因果关系。注意时态一致（'ever since' 可用现在完成时表持续）。

示例: Yes. I went to a concert last month and her powerful voice impressed me so much that I’ve been recommending her to everyone I know ever since.

建议: 内容真诚但有语法与用词问题（'She's' 后大小写，'celebrated' 用法错误，应为 'celebrates' 或 'celebrate it with me'）。句子可更简洁并避免重复。

示例: Definitely my mother. She always supports me, so whenever I have good news I tell her first and she celebrates it with me, which makes me feel proud.

建议: 主旨明确，但最后一句有表达错误（'try to live their mood' 不通顺，应为 'try to lift their mood' 或 'not to bring them down'）。可用更自然的连接词并简化结构以提高流畅度。

示例: I usually share positive news, like personal achievements or funny videos. I used to tell them worrying news too, but I realised that could stress them, so now I avoid burdening friends and try to lift their mood instead.

× Her lessons really helped me become more generous.

✓ Their lessons really helped me become more generous.

原句使用了单数所有格代词 “Her” 指代 “my elder brother and my mother”，但先行词是复数（elder brother and my mother），因此代词也应为复数 “their”。建议在提到两个或以上人时使用复数代词以保持代词与先行词一致。

× For example, I often bring snacks to share, recommend a book I have recently read and sent some funny videos or good news.

✓ For example, I often bring snacks to share, recommend a book I have recently read, and send some funny videos or good news.

此处列举了并列动词短语，应保持动词时态和形式一致。原句中的动词序列是 bring, recommend 和 sent，其中 sent 为过去式，与前两项不一致。应改为原形/现在时的 send 以与一般现在时的语境一致。建议在并列动词中保持相同动词形式，并在并列项之间加入逗号。

× Because these small actions can lift their mood and strengthen our friendships.

✓ Because these small actions can lift their moods and strengthen our friendships.

“their mood” 指代多个朋友时应使用复数名词 moods 表示各自的心情，而不是单数的 mood。将 mood 变为复数以匹配复数代词 their。

× you should never lend your passport to other or share your bank details because doing so may lead to financial loss or identity theft.

✓ you should never lend your passport to others or share your bank details because doing so may lead to financial loss or identity theft.

原句中使用 “other” 作为代词不正确，应该使用复数代词 “others” 来表示“他人”。建议在表示“其他人”时用 others。

× Also, you should not disclose the secrets you have promised other to keep because you may hurt others feeling if you do so.

✓ Also, you should not disclose the secrets you have promised others to keep because you may hurt others' feelings if you do so.

存在两个问题：1) “promised other to keep” 中的 other 应为 others；2) “hurt others feeling” 中 feeling 应为复数 feelings，并且要用所有格 others' feelings 表示“别人的感受”。建议使用 others 与 others' feelings。

× Her powerful voice and amazing performance impressed me a lot, so I have been recommending her to everyone I know ever since.

✓ Her powerful voice and amazing performance impressed me a lot, so I have been recommending her to everyone I know since then.

短语 “ever since” 用法不当。句中已使用现在完成进行时（have been recommending）并带有具体的时间参照（上个月去听演唱会），应使用 since then 表示从那时起一直持续到现在。建议用 since then 更符合语境。

× Definitely my mother, She's the person who always supports me and stands by my side.

✓ Definitely my mother. She's the person who always supports me and stands by my side.

这是标点和句子边界问题而非单词语法，但属于句子结构错误（可归为第26项或第22项）；原句把两句合成一个逗号连接的大写 She's 不合适，应该用句号分开或用连接词。建议将其分成两个完整的句子以保持书写和语法规范。

× Then she will get really happy and always celebrated with me.

✓ Then she will get really happy and always celebrate with me.

原句中时态混用：先用将来时 will get，但随后用 past tense celebrated，与将来时不一致。应将 celebrated 改为原形动词 celebrate 或使用 will celebrate，以匹配将来时态。建议在描述未来习惯性动作时使用 will + 动词原形。

× I also enjoy making her proud of me.

✓ I also enjoy making her proud of me.

句子语法本身无误，但与上下文重复，保留即可。此项不需要修改。

× I used to tell them negative or worrying news, but then I realized that could make them feel stressed.

✓ I used to tell them negative or worrying news, but then I realized that could make them feel stressed.

句子语法正确，无需修改。

× So now I avoid burdening them and try to live their mood instead.

✓ So now I avoid burdening them and try to lift their mood instead.

原句中的 'live their mood' 显然是词语选择错误，应为 'lift their mood'（使他们心情好起来）。这是词汇搭配/副词位置问题，需替换为正确动词短语。建议记忆常用搭配，如 lift someone's mood。