礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant phrasing (e.g., “especially like to my colleagues” and “even if it's like small amount”). Use linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts, especially to my colleagues. For example, when I see something nice at a shop I often buy it for them, even if it’s inexpensive, because I like to show appreciation.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific detail. Replace vague phrasing like “random days” with a brief explanation. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: I usually give gifts on my friends’ birthdays, but I also give small presents on ordinary days to surprise them and brighten their week.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid apologetic or uncertain language. Be specific about how you find out preferences and remove awkward phrasing like “they just pretend.” Use a linking word to clarify your reasoning.

示例: I consider the recipient’s preferences first. For instance, I ask about their hobbies or notice what they use, so I can choose something they will genuinely enjoy rather than something they feel obliged to like.

建议: Keep the answer natural and add one concise detail about the reaction or why you chose to make candles. Use linking words to connect learning and giving.

示例: Yes, I used to learn candle-making, so I made and gave handmade candles to friends and colleagues. They appreciated the personal touch and often said the scent was lovely.

建议: Give a direct opinion with one clear reason and a brief example. Correct grammar (e.g., “the price... doesn’t matter”) and use a linking word to support your view.

示例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better, because thoughtfulness matters more. For example, a heartfelt handwritten letter or a small homemade item can mean more than an expensive but impersonal present.

× Yes I'm good at giving gifts especially like to my colleagues.

✓ Yes, I'm good at giving gifts, especially to my colleagues.

Remove the redundant 'like' and place 'to my colleagues' directly after 'especially'. Use a comma after introductory yes and before 'especially' for clarity. This fixes incorrect preposition and word choice.

× If I say something at the shop I always buy and give it to them even if it's like small amount.

✓ If I see something at a shop, I always buy it and give it to them, even if it is a small item.

Use 'see' not 'say' for noticing items. Use 'a shop' (indefinite article) and change word order to 'buy it and give it to them'. Replace informal 'like small amount' with 'a small item' for clarity. Commas improve sentence structure.

× Usually I give my friends gifts on their birthday, but normally I just give in random days.

✓ Usually I give my friends gifts on their birthdays, but normally I just give them on random days.

Use plural 'birthdays' when referring to different friends. Include the object 'them' after 'give'. Use 'on random days' as the correct prepositional phrase.

× I consider their preference.

✓ I consider their preferences.

Use plural 'preferences' to match 'their' (multiple people) and to sound natural when referring to more than one person's likes.

× I always think first what they like so if I give it to them they can show me their smile or they just pretend they like it because it's from someone.

✓ I always think first about what they like, so if I give it to them they will show me a smile, or they might just pretend to like it because it is from someone.

Add 'about' after 'think' and use future/modal 'will' or 'might' for probable reactions. Use 'a smile' and 'pretend to like it' for correct verb patterns. Add commas to separate clauses.

× Yes, because I used to learn how to make the candles.

✓ Yes, because I learned how to make candles.

'Used to learn' is awkward; use simple past 'learned' to indicate past ability/experience. Also remove 'the' before 'candles' when speaking generally.

× So at that time I gave my handmade candles to my friends and my colleagues.

✓ So at that time I gave my handmade candles to my friends and colleagues.

Omit the second 'my' as it is redundant. 'Friends and colleagues' is parallel and natural without repeating the possessive.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Sentence form is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. However, in spoken English 'Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?' is slightly more natural, but original is grammatically correct so no change applied.

× No, I don't think that way. I think the price of present is really doesn't matter. The heart is better.

✓ No, I don't think that way. I think the price of a present really doesn't matter. The thought behind it matters more.

Add article 'a' before 'present'. Remove redundant 'is' before 'doesn't'. Replace 'The heart is better' with a natural phrasing 'The thought behind it matters more' to convey intended meaning. These fixes correct article usage and verb structure.