购物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details (when, with whom) using linking words. Reduce hesitations and incorrect phrasing (e.g. “I do shopping” → “I go shopping”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I usually go with my sister or parents for special events, and I also shop when I need something important, so I try to plan trips to save time.

建议: Provide a clear reason and specific method. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear phrases like “I meet my merchant.” Explain how comparing helps (save money, stick to a budget).

示例: Yes, I always compare prices because it helps me stay within my budget. For example, I check different online stores and local shops to find the best deal before I buy.

建议: Start with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific supporting detail. Improve word choice (e.g. “I research” not “I studied”) and remove repetition.

示例: No, it isn't difficult. I usually research products online and decide in advance which items I want, so I can choose quickly when I shop.

建议: Avoid absolute statements. Offer a balanced view with examples and linking words (e.g. “usually” or “sometimes”) and correct grammar (e.g. “expensive products usually have better quality”).

示例: Not always. Expensive products often have better quality and longer warranties, but cheaper items can be fine for short-term use; for example, I buy an expensive phone but choose affordable accessories.

× Yes, I like shopping so much.

✓ Yes, I like shopping very much.

Use of 'so much' is informal but acceptable; changing to 'very much' is more natural in this context. No grammatical change in verb form needed; this suggestion improves register and collocation.

× Uh, I do shopping with my sister and my parents on events and umm, uh, when I use when I thought it's necessary.

✓ I go shopping with my sister and my parents on special occasions and when I think it's necessary.

'Do shopping' is a non-native collocation; native speakers usually say 'go shopping' (verb + -ing collocation). 'On events' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'on special occasions.' 'When I use when I thought' mixes tenses and words; correct is 'when I think it's necessary' (present tense to match habitual action). This correction addresses verb collocation (8), incorrect use of prepositions (11), and tense consistency (6). Note: per instructions, only errors listed are corrected; primary change is to correct verb + -ing collocation and preposition and tense.

× Yes, I too compare prices when I shop because I meet my merchant like I used to buy all that stuff, all that things in my budget so that is why.

✓ Yes, I also compare prices when I shop because I meet the seller and try to buy things within my budget, so I compare prices.

'I too' is grammatically okay but 'I also' is more natural. 'Meet my merchant' is odd; 'meet the seller' or 'shop from a seller' is better (incorrect noun choice/pronoun reference). 'All that stuff, all that things' contains plural error and redundancy; use 'things' or 'items'. 'In my budget' should be 'within my budget.' This addresses incorrect use of pronouns/nouns (12), singular/plural issues (1), and word choice; tense remains present habitual.

× No, it's not difficult for me because I already studied and check all the website and uh, pick the stuff, pick the things which I want to buy. So no.

✓ No, it's not difficult for me because I have already studied and checked all the websites and chosen the items I want to buy.

Mixing past simple 'already studied' with present 'check' is inconsistent. Use present perfect 'have already studied' and past participles 'checked' and 'chosen' to show completed actions relevant to now. 'All the website' should be plural 'websites.' 'Pick the stuff' should be 'chosen the items.' This addresses present tense issue (6), verb past participle forms (9), and singular/plural issue (1).

× Yes, it is the expensive product, uh, have umm, better quality lifetime guarantees.

✓ Yes, an expensive product often has better quality and lifetime guarantees.

Using 'the expensive product' incorrectly generalizes; use 'an expensive product' to speak generally. Verb form 'have' must agree: 'has' for singular, but restructuring to plural noun 'a product has' or 'products have' fixes subject-verb agreement. Also 'better quality lifetime guarantees' is awkward; separate as 'better quality and lifetime guarantees.' This addresses definite article misuse (17) and subject-verb agreement (27).

× A bit expensive, but it's OK to buy this expensive product, it's worth it.

✓ It is a bit expensive, but it's OK to buy because it's worth it.

Fragment 'A bit expensive' should be a full clause 'It is a bit expensive.' Repeating 'this expensive product' is redundant; simplify to 'it's OK to buy because it's worth it.' Maintain present tense consistently. This addresses present tense issue (6) and sentence structure errors (26).