耐心— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy and correct grammar. Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I consider myself fairly patient. However, my family sometimes says I get irritated quickly when things don't go as planned.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then a specific example. Use correct verb forms and a linking phrase to make it coherent. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: I become impatient when plans don't go as I expected. For example, I get frustrated if a project is delayed because others miss deadlines.

建議: Organize into a topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting points. Use correct tenses and natural phrases, avoid fillers like "you know". Use linking words (because, so, therefore) correctly and be more concise.

範例: I feel a bit tired when I work on something for a long time, but I remind myself to keep going because sustained effort usually produces good results and opens up more opportunities.

建議: Answer directly and simply. State your current situation, then speculate briefly about future jobs using clear grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition.

範例: I don't have a job at the moment. However, I expect that any future job will require patience, especially when handling difficult tasks or working with others.

建議: Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific reason using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like "enough much responsible."

範例: Yes, I am more patient now. As a child I had fewer responsibilities, but growing older and facing more challenges has taught me to be more patient.

× I think I'm enough patient person but my family say I am not patient person at all.

✓ I think I'm patient enough, but my family say I am not patient at all.

Use of 'enough' should come after the adjective (patient enough). Also need articles: 'a patient person' can be simplified to 'patient' or 'a patient person'. 'Say' should be 'say' only if family regarded as plural (they). If keeping 'family' as collective plural, 'say' is acceptable. The corrected sentence places 'enough' correctly and removes redundant words to sound natural.

× I think I'm enough patient person but my family say I am not patient person at all.

✓ I think I'm patient enough, but my family says I am not patient at all.

If 'family' is treated as a singular collective noun, the verb must be 'says' (subject-verb agreement). Alternatively, treating 'family' as plural would keep 'say'. Choose one and be consistent.

× Sometimes something make me not patient, for example if things goes not as I want.

✓ Sometimes something makes me impatient, for example when things do not go as I want.

Use the verb 'make' with third person singular 'makes' (subject-verb agreement) and use the adjective 'impatient' rather than 'not patient'. Use 'when' for time clause and correct word order 'do not go' not 'goes not'.

× Sometimes something make me not patient, for example if things goes not as I want.

✓ Sometimes something makes me impatient, for example if things do not go as I want.

The subject 'something' requires the verb 'makes' (third person singular). Also 'things' plural needs 'do not go' not 'goes not'. Replace 'not patient' with the single-word adjective 'impatient' for natural English.

× You know, I feel little bit tired but I always said to myself that I should do that because if I want to get some good result of that, so I try hardly and after that I think it will gives me a lot of opportunity in future.

✓ You know, I feel a little tired, but I always tell myself that I should do it because if I want to get good results from it, I try hard, and after that I think it will give me a lot of opportunities in the future.

Use present simple 'tell' instead of past 'said' because speaker refers to a habitual action. Use 'a little' and 'tired'. 'Do that' -> 'do it'. 'Some good result of that' -> 'good results from it'. 'Try hardly' is incorrect; use 'try hard'. 'Will gives' should be 'will give' (future tense with base verb). Plural 'opportunities' is more natural.

× You know, I feel little bit tired but I always said to myself that I should do that because if I want to get some good result of that, so I try hardly and after that I think it will gives me a lot of opportunity in future.

✓ You know, I feel a little tired, but I always tell myself that I should do it because if I want to get good results from it, I try hard, and after that I think it will give me a lot of opportunities in the future.

Use 'from' to indicate source ('results from it') and 'in the future' requires the definite article 'the'. Also 'a little' and 'a lot of' need correct articles.

× I don't have a job now, what I think in future when I'll have a job, it's all required, required me to make me feel patient more.

✓ I don't have a job now. I think in the future, when I have a job, it will require me to be more patient.

Use future simple 'will require' or present simple 'requires' depending on meaning; 'when I have a job' uses present simple for future time clause (preferred). 'Required me to make me feel patient more' is ungrammatical; use 'require me to be more patient'.

× I don't have a job now, what I think in future when I'll have a job, it's all required, required me to make me feel patient more.

✓ I don't have a job now. I think in the future, when I have a job, it will require me to be more patient.

In time clauses with 'when' referring to the future, the present simple ('when I have') is used rather than 'when I'll have'. Use 'will require' for the main clause. Also correct infinitive 'to be' after 'require'.

× Are you more patient now than when you were a child?

✓ Are you more patient now than when you were a child?

This sentence is correct; no change needed. 'Were' is correct for past reference and subject-verb agreement is fine.

× Yes, I think so, because when I were a child I don't have enough much responsible as now, so the life makes me more patient.

✓ Yes, I think so, because when I was a child I didn't have as many responsibilities as I do now, so life has made me more patient.

Use past tense 'was' not 'were' for first/third person singular in this context. 'Don't have' should be past 'didn't have'. 'Enough much responsible' is incorrect: use 'as many responsibilities'. Use 'life has made me' or 'life made me' to express change over time. Also omit 'the' before 'life' and add 'do' in 'as I do now' for correct comparison.