记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct common mistakes (memorising → memorizing; thing → things).

範例: Not really. I'm not very good at memorizing things. For example, I often forget where I put my keys even a few minutes after placing them, which can be quite frustrating.

建議: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct anecdote with logical sequence and linking words. Use past tense consistently and choose accurate words (e.g., 'army card' or 'ID card', 'admit' → 'admission slip' or 'admit card'). Keep it to two or three sentences and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, once I forgot my ID card before an important exam. As a result, the invigilators did not allow me to enter the exam hall, and I missed that test, which was very stressful.

建議: Answer directly with a topic sentence and specific examples, using linking words like 'for example' or 'sometimes'. Correct word choice (copy → notebook; pain → pen) and avoid filler words. Keep it within three sentences.

範例: I need to remember items for my classes, such as my textbooks, notebook, and pens. For example, sometimes I forget my notebook, which makes it hard to take notes during lectures.

建議: Explain a clear method using correct vocabulary and sequence. Mention specific tools and a brief reason for your method. Avoid unsafe habits (storing passwords in plain notes) — if relevant, mention a safer approach.

範例: I usually write important things in the Notes app on my phone because it's convenient and always with me. For sensitive details like passwords, I use a secure password manager instead of plain notes to keep them safe.

× No, I'm not good at memorizing thing.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorizing things.

The noun 'thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items in general. Use plural with general references or when unspecified number >1. Suggestion: use 'things' for general abilities to memorize multiple items.

× I forgot everything where I kept just 5 minutes ago and that's it.

✓ I forgot everything I had put away just 5 minutes ago, and that's it.

The original mixes simple past with a relative clause incorrectly. Use past perfect 'had put' to show the action occurred before the forgetting, and rephrase 'where I kept' to 'I had put away' for clarity. Also add a comma before 'and that's it.'

× Yes, I forgot to take my army car during my examination time and there was the biggest nightmare I had till now and and the guard and the officer did not allow me to enter into the class for giving my examination because I don't have admit.

✓ Yes, I forgot to take my army card during my exam, and it was the worst nightmare I've had so far. The guard and the officer did not allow me to enter the classroom to take my exam because I didn't have my admit card.

Multiple issues: 'army car' is likely 'army card' (vocabulary). Use simple past 'forgot' and 'did not allow' consistently. 'There was the biggest nightmare I had till now' should be 'it was the worst nightmare I've had so far' (present perfect for experience up to now). Use 'classroom' and 'to take my exam' instead of 'for giving my examination'. Use past tense 'didn't have' for missing the admit card at that time.

× Currently I need to remember umm my things such as my book and copy and pen for my eyes class.

✓ Currently I need to remember my things, such as my book, notebook, and pen for my English class.

Articles and noun choice: 'copy' is unclear—use 'notebook'. No article needed before plural 'my things'. Also 'eyes class' seems incorrect; likely 'English class'. Use commas to separate items.

× Sometimes I forgot to bring book or sometimes I forgot to bring pain and which usually make me in a big trouble.

✓ Sometimes I forget to bring my book, or sometimes I forget to bring my pen, which usually gets me into big trouble.

Use plural/possessive 'my book' and 'my pen' and present simple 'forget' for habitual actions. 'Pain' is incorrect word; should be 'pen'. 'Make me in a big trouble' is ungrammatical—use 'gets me into big trouble.'

× I remember important thing by writing it into the textbooks or whether into the nose in the mobile.

✓ I remember important things by writing them in textbooks or in the notes on my phone.

Use plural 'things' and plural pronoun 'them' to agree. 'Writing it into the textbooks' is awkward; use 'writing them in textbooks'. 'Whether into the nose in the mobile' is incorrect—use 'notes on my phone'.

× I often write some passwords which are important for my bank account and my Apple ID.

✓ I often write down passwords that are important for my bank account and my Apple ID.

Use phrasal verb 'write down' for recording information. Use 'that' for restrictive clauses. Preposition 'for' is acceptable, but 'important for my bank account' is clearer as 'important for accessing my bank account' if needed.

× I usually store it in my note.

✓ I usually store them in my notes.

Pronoun agreement: 'them' agrees with 'passwords'. 'Note' should be plural 'notes' (or 'note app' if singular). Preposition 'in' is fine; ensure noun form matches usage.