唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and grammatical errors (e.g., “listen to some songs”, “serene” could be “calming”). Keep under five sentences.

範例: No, I don’t really enjoy singing. Instead, I prefer listening to music — for example, Punjabi singers or English rappers — because upbeat songs motivate me while studying. I also listen to calming tracks when I need to relax.

建議: Answer directly and link ideas smoothly. Say you haven’t learned singing, then briefly mention the related skill (guitar) as a contrast using a linking word like “however”. Correct phrasing: “learned how to play the guitar” and avoid redundancy.

範例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. However, I did learn how to play the guitar because I’m interested in musical instruments and prefer playing music to singing.

建議: Be clearer and avoid hesitation or repetition. Start with a direct reply: you don’t usually sing, but if you did, say who and why. Use one or two specific details and natural phrasing: “for a friend” or “at family gatherings”. Keep sentences short and cohesive.

範例: I don’t usually sing, but if I had the chance I would play a song and dance for close friends or family. That would help us relax and enjoy time together, strengthening our bond.

建議: Organize your answer: start with a clear main idea, then give two specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Correct mistakes: “releases endorphins”, “reduces stress”, and clarify the second point (e.g., “singing in a group builds social connection”). Use linking words like “first” and “second” properly.

範例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier. First, singing releases endorphins and reduces stress, which improves mood. Second, singing with others creates social bonds and a sense of belonging, which also boosts happiness.

× I always prefer to listen some songs of famous Punjabi singers or English rappers to motivate myself towards my studies.

✓ I always prefer to listen to some songs by famous Punjabi singers or English rappers to motivate myself in my studies.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when specifying what is listened to; 'listen some songs' is incorrect. Use 'listen to some songs'. Also, 'songs of famous singers' is better expressed as 'songs by famous singers'. Use 'in my studies' or 'with my studies' rather than 'towards my studies' for natural collocation.

× And apart from that I also prefer to listen some serene songs so that I keep my mind relaxed.

✓ Apart from that, I also prefer to listen to some serene songs so that I can keep my mind relaxed.

Again 'listen' needs 'to' before its object. Adding 'can' makes the purpose clause natural: 'so that I can keep my mind relaxed.' Also add a comma after the introductory phrase for clarity.

× To be honest, no, I have never taken a singing class here.

✓ To be honest, no, I have never taken a singing class.

The original sentence is grammatical but 'here' is unnecessary and may be awkward depending on context; removing it makes the sentence more natural. The present perfect 'have never taken' is correctly used to indicate experience up to now.

× In spite of that, I learned about how to play a guitar because I have a keen interest in playing guitars or any other musical instruments.

✓ Despite that, I learned how to play the guitar because I have a keen interest in playing guitars and other musical instruments.

Use 'despite' or 'in spite of' followed by a noun phrase; 'In spite of that, I learned about how to play' is awkward. Use 'learned how to play' rather than 'learned about how to play'. Use 'the guitar' as a general reference and 'and other musical instruments' instead of 'or any other' for fluency.

× As I mentioned you earlier, I'm not fond of singing.

✓ As I mentioned to you earlier, I'm not fond of singing.

The verb 'mention' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating the person mentioned: 'mentioned to you'. Without 'to' the sentence is ungrammatical.

× I always prefer to listen some songs.

✓ I always prefer to listen to some songs.

Again, 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object: 'listen to some songs.'

× If I if I got some chance, then I prefer to play a song for the other individual and prefer to dance with him or her so that we can have some better time together and share a good bond between ourselves.

✓ If I got a chance, I would prefer to play a song for the other person and dance with them so that we can have a better time together and build a stronger bond.

The original has repetition ('If I if I') and uses incorrect conditional and modal forms. Use 'If I got a chance, I would prefer' for a hypothetical situation. 'Other individual' is unnatural; use 'other person'. Use 'them' as a gender-neutral singular pronoun instead of 'him or her'. 'Have some better time' should be 'have a better time' and 'share a good bond between ourselves' is awkward; use 'build a stronger bond.'

× as singing brings happiness to a lot of individuals who sings?

✓ Yes indeed, singing brings happiness to a lot of individuals who sing.

Subject-verb agreement: plural 'individuals' requires the verb 'sing' not 'sings'. Also the original had a question mark mid-sentence and incorrect structure; corrected to a declarative clause aligned with the response.

× Firstly, whenever any individual sings, it releases the endorphins and after the stress bursar for them which improve their mood and motivates them towards their goals.

✓ Firstly, whenever an individual sings, it releases endorphins and reduces stress for them, which improves their mood and motivates them toward their goals.

Use 'an individual' not 'any individual' for this general statement. 'Endorphins' does not need 'the'. 'After the stress bursar' is incorrect — likely intended 'reduces stress'. Use the noun and verb agreement: 'which improves their mood and motivates them' (singular 'which' refers to the action; keep verbs singular/plural consistent). 'Towards' can be 'toward' or 'towards' — either is acceptable; 'toward' is used here for conciseness.

× Secondly, they can sing in a group or foster.

✓ Secondly, they can sing in a group or together with others.

The word 'foster' is incorrect in this context; it means to promote or encourage. Use 'together with others' or 'in a choir' to convey singing socially. The corrected sentence gives a clear, grammatical alternative.