唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like singing, then give 1–2 specific reasons. Use correct verb forms, articles, and avoid redundancy (e.g., “more better” is incorrect). Aim for 2–3 concise sentences with linking words like because or so.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. For example, after a long day at work I often sing along to my favorite songs to lift my mood.

建議: Answer directly and use simple past or present perfect when describing learning. Explain briefly how you learn with clear verbs (practice, watch, take lessons). Use linking words like so or when to make it coherent, and avoid unclear phrases like “learn how to say it.”

範例: Yes, I have learned to sing. I usually practice every day and watch online lessons by a vocal teacher when I have free time so I can improve my technique.

建議: Be concise and correct pronouns/phrases: start with a direct answer (e.g., “I would like to sing for my boyfriend.”). Give a brief reason with proper grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words like because.

範例: I would like to sing for my boyfriend because he enjoys my voice and it makes him happy when I sing to him.

建議: Give a clear opinion then support it with a specific reason or example. Use correct sentence forms and smoother linking (for example, “because,” “so,” or “for instance”). Avoid filler words and unclear phrasing like “can be happiness to people.”

範例: Yes, I do. Singing can make people happier because it helps them relax and enjoy their free time; for instance, many people sing along to music when they feel bored to lift their spirits.

× Why yes, of course, I really like seeing this because singing make me feel more better and can release my stress.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like singing because it makes me feel much better and can relieve my stress.

Errors: 'seeing this' is incorrect word choice for enjoying the act of singing; use 'singing'. 'make' is wrong for third-person singular subject 'singing' so use 'makes' (Third person singular/subject-verb agreement). 'more better' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'much better' or simply 'better'. 'release my stress' is acceptable but 'relieve my stress' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and avoid redundant comparatives. ID: 1, 2

× Yes, I learn how to say it 'cause everyday I always say and when I have free time I usually see the video by the teacher saying and to practice more how to sing.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing because I practice every day, and when I have free time I usually watch videos by the teacher to practice singing more.

Errors: Tense inconsistency: 'learn' should be past tense 'learned' for 'have learnt' question or present perfect depending; natural response uses past simple for having learned a skill. 'how to say it' is wrong phrase; use 'how to sing'. 'everyday' should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). 'I always say' is incorrect verb choice; 'practice' fits. 'see the video' should be 'watch videos'. 'by the teacher saying' is ungrammatical; use 'by the teacher' or 'of the teacher'. 'to practice more how to sing' should be 'to practice singing more'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms, proper collocations (learned, practice, watch videos) and correct adverb spelling. ID: 6, 8

× I want to see you for my boyfriend, 'cause my boyfriend he like my voice.

✓ I want to sing for my boyfriend because he likes my voice.

Errors: 'see you for my boyfriend' is incorrect—should be 'sing for my boyfriend' to match question. Redundant pronoun 'my boyfriend he' is incorrect; use subject pronoun 'he'. 'like' needs third-person singular 'likes' for subject 'he'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'sing', avoid redundancy, and ensure subject-verb agreement. ID: 12, 1, 2

× Yes, of course. Uh, I think singing can be happiness to people because they can more enjoy when they have a free time when they had a boring and they can, uh, singing.

✓ Yes, of course. I think singing can bring happiness to people because they can enjoy themselves more when they have free time or when they are bored, and they can sing.

Errors: 'can be happiness to people' is unnatural – use 'can bring happiness to people'. 'they can more enjoy' is incorrect adverb placement; use 'enjoy themselves more'. 'when they have a free time' should be 'when they have free time' (no article). 'when they had a boring' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'when they are bored'. Final clause 'they can, uh, singing' should be 'they can sing' (verb form). Suggestion: use natural collocations (bring happiness), correct adverb placement, correct article use, and appropriate verb forms. ID: 13, 20, 22, 6, 8