爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct article and word order errors and remove redundancy.

範例: Yes, I do. My favourite hobby is reading because it helps me relax and learn new things. For example, I often read historical novels and self‑help books, which give me new ideas and a sense of achievement.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then explain with clearer, grammatically correct examples. Use linking words (for example, when, so) and avoid hesitation sounds. Be specific about which activities you liked and why.

範例: Yes. As a child, my hobbies changed depending on what I saw. For example, when I watched films I wanted to act, and when I visited hospitals I wanted to be a doctor; this shows I was fascinated by different roles.

建議: Answer directly and correct verb forms and articles. Explain briefly why you kept this interest, with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I do. Since childhood I have wanted to become a nurse because I like helping people. For instance, I used to volunteer at local clinics, which strengthened my desire to work in hospitals and support patients.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific comparison. Correct grammar and avoid apologetic or unclear phrases. Use linking words (however, while) and provide a concise reason and an example of a family member's hobby to contrast.

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. While my family enjoys outdoor activities like gardening and sports, I prefer staying in my room reading or listening to music, which helps me relax.

× There are many hobbies the my favorite one is reading.

✓ There are many hobbies, and my favorite one is reading.

The original sentence misuses the article 'the' and lacks a conjunction. Replace 'the' with 'and' and add a comma to join the two clauses. Also remove the extra 'the' before 'my'. Suggestion: connect independent clauses with a conjunction and use articles only where needed.

× After reading I feel like I am winning and this gives me peace.

✓ When I read, I feel like I am winning, and it gives me peace.

Use a proper adverbial clause 'When I read' rather than 'After reading' to match the simple present habit. Include a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' and replace 'this' with the pronoun 'it' to refer to the action of reading. Suggestion: use consistent tense and clear pronoun references.

× That's why reading is my favorite hobby among all.

✓ That's why reading is my favorite hobby of all.

The idiomatic expression is 'favorite ... of all' rather than 'among all' in this context. 'Among all' is awkward when referring to a single item being the favorite. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'favorite of all'.

× Uh that is very funny question for me because if my hobbies tends to be depend on situations like if I see movies I want to be heroin actors, if I went hospitals I want to be doctors if I see game.

✓ Uh, that is a very funny question for me because my hobbies tend to depend on the situation: if I watch movies, I want to be a heroine/actor; if I go to hospitals, I want to be a doctor; if I see a game, ...

Multiple problems: article and noun number ('a very funny question'), subject-verb agreement ('hobbies tend' not 'tends'), incorrect verb forms ('depend' -> 'depend on the situation'), wrong verb for watching movies ('watch' not 'see' usually), wrong form 'heroin actors' should be 'a heroine' or 'an actor', past tense 'went' should be base 'go', plural mismatch 'doctors' -> 'a doctor', missing articles before 'game'. Only corrections that match the provided grammar list were applied: subject-verb agreement (ID 27), verb tense/form (IDs 5 and 6), and article errors (ID 22). Suggestion: keep consistent present tense when describing habitual tendencies, match singular/plural and use correct articles, and choose appropriate verbs like 'watch' or 'go to'.

× Yes I do, my hobby since childhood is to be become nurse.

✓ Yes I do. My childhood hobby is to become a nurse.

Use present simple for a continuing fact: 'My childhood hobby is...' Remove the extra 'be' in 'to be become' and include the article 'a' before 'nurse'. Suggestion: avoid redundant auxiliary verbs and include articles with singular countable nouns.

× I really want to work hospitals as a nurse and giving helps towards the patients because it really helps the humans that's why.

✓ I really want to work in hospitals as a nurse and help patients because it really helps people; that's why.

Use the base verb 'help' after 'and' to join two verbs with the same subject ('work' and 'help'), not the -ing form 'giving'. Add the preposition 'in' before 'hospitals' and the article usage: 'patients' needs no article, 'people' is more natural than 'the humans'. Split into clearer clauses with punctuation. Suggestion: coordinate verbs with the base form after 'and', use correct prepositions, and choose natural nouns.

× Unfortunately not, I have different hobbies rather than others because I am sorry for something since childhood I I just want to spend my times on a room like reading or listening songs like that but other persons.

✓ Unfortunately not. I have different hobbies from other family members because since childhood I just want to spend my time alone in my room reading or listening to songs, unlike them.

Many issues: use 'different from' not 'different rather than', 'other family members' clarifies referent, 'since childhood' with present perfect/simple present for a continuing state, remove duplicate 'I', use 'time' (uncountable) not 'times', 'in a room' -> 'in my room', 'listening to songs' needs preposition 'to', and 'other persons' -> 'them' or 'other people'. Corrections align with preposition errors (ID 11), pronoun use (ID 12), article errors (ID 22), and sentence structure (ID 26). Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct prepositions, pronouns, and avoid repetition.