爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm, uh), correct grammar (singular/plural), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

範例: I have several hobbies. For example, I practise yoga three times a week to relax, and I also enjoy sketching nature scenes when I visit forests because it helps me notice small details like birds and plants.

建議: Provide a clear, grammatically correct statement about past hobbies. Use past tense consistently, remove fillers, and add a specific example or memory to support your answer. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I had a few hobbies as a child. For instance, I loved drawing pictures of trees and animals, and I often spent afternoons making small sketchbooks to record places I visited.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and verbs (e.g., 'I've enjoyed singing since childhood'). Explain briefly why it matters, with specific detail. Reduce repetition and fillers, and keep to 1–3 clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed singing since I was a child. Singing has always made me happy, so I practised often and joined school choirs to improve my voice and confidence.

建議: Be concise and use correct grammar and linking words. State the similarity clearly, give one specific supporting detail about your family member, and perhaps say how this influenced you. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, my mother also likes singing. When she was young, she entered singing competitions, and because of her example I became interested in singing too.

× I do like yoga, sometimes I draw natural pictures on the forest area.

✓ I like yoga; sometimes I draw pictures of nature in the forest.

The original uses 'do like' which is unnecessary for simple present affirmative and awkward phrasing 'natural pictures on the forest area.' Use simple present 'I like' for habits. 'Pictures of nature' and 'in the forest' are the correct noun and prepositional phrase forms. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines and natural noun-preposition combinations (picture(s) of nature, in the forest).

× That's my, uh, favorite hobbies.

✓ Those are my favorite hobbies.

'Hobbies' is plural so the plural demonstrative 'those' is needed; 'my favorite hobbies' matches plural. The original used singular 'That's' which is incorrect with a plural noun. Suggestion: Match demonstrative pronoun number to the noun (that/this for singular, those/these for plural).

× Yes, I have been uh, several hobbies when I was a child, such as I mentioned before, umm, I really enjoy drawing, uh, nature's picture and also umm, I uh, I had.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies when I was a child. As I mentioned before, I really enjoyed drawing pictures of nature.

Mixing present perfect 'have been' with past time 'when I was a child' is incorrect. Use simple past 'had' and 'enjoyed' for past habits. 'Nature's picture' is awkward; use 'pictures of nature.' The original also contains incomplete fragments which should be completed. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently when referring to past time periods and use natural noun phrases like 'pictures of nature.'

× Yes, I had a hobby that I've had since my childhood, umm, I really enjoyed uh, sing a song because umm, it feels it felt me a lot of happiness when I was seeing singing, I usually felt.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since my childhood: I really enjoy singing because it gives me a lot of happiness when I sing.

The original mixes past 'had' and present perfect 'I've had' incorrectly and uses incorrect verb forms 'sing a song' and 'it feels it felt me.' For a hobby continuing from childhood to present, use present perfect 'have had.' Use gerund 'singing' after 'enjoy.' Express emotion with 'it gives me happiness' or 'it makes me happy.' Remove redundant or fragmented parts. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions that started in the past and continue to present, use gerund after verbs like 'enjoy,' and use idiomatic expressions ('it makes me happy', 'it gives me happiness').

× Yes, my mom also really good sing a song.

✓ Yes, my mom is also really good at singing.

'Really good' modifies ability and needs a linking verb and preposition: 'is good at' followed by a gerund 'singing.' The original lacks the verb 'is' and the preposition 'at.' Suggestion: Use 'be + good at + -ing' for abilities (e.g., 'She is good at dancing').

× She when she was a young she used to attend singing competition and she was really singing song.

✓ When she was young, she used to enter singing competitions and she sang very well.

Original has word order errors and incorrect noun forms: 'a young' should be 'young'; 'attend singing competition' should be 'enter/attend singing competitions' and plural or include an article; 'was really singing song' is ungrammatical—use 'sang very well' or 'was a good singer.' Also remove redundant 'she' and correct word order. Suggestion: Use correct word order 'When she was young,' use plural for repeated events 'competitions' or 'a competition,' and use simple past or 'used to' for past habits; express ability with 'sang very well'.