爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and irrelevant phrases (e.g. “thinking in the color”, “cloud gate”). Aim to give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and link them with simple connectors. Use present tense for current habits and future tense for plans. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I have a few hobbies. Right now I enjoy singing with friends, but recently I have been too busy studying to sing often. If I have more free time in the future, I plan to join a local choir and practice regularly.

建議: Good content: you answered directly and gave specific details and feelings. Improve sentence coherence and grammar: combine short fragments, use correct verb forms, and add a linking word to connect inspiration and result. Keep responses concise (3–4 sentences).

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I enjoyed drawing flowers such as carnations and sunflowers in a simple garden style. I was inspired by pictures in storybooks, so drawing made me feel calm and happy.

建議: The idea is clear but the answer has run-on sentences and grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g. because, so, although). Correct verb forms and punctuation to make it natural and within the sentence limit.

範例: Yes, I still draw in my free time because it helps me relax after work. I usually sketch flowers like carnations and sunflowers, although my style is more detailed now than when I was a child.

建議: The response is partly relevant but contains confusing information ("pet bed called Mickey", "get our bed together"). Keep the answer directly about shared hobbies and give a clear example of how you share the hobby. Use simple linking words and correct grammar.

範例: Yes, my younger sister also enjoys drawing, so we often draw together and share ideas. For example, we sit side by side and critique each other’s sketches, which helps us improve.

× I used to thinking in the color OK with fans, but in today I have many hard to study so I don't have time to thinking in the cloud gate.

✓ I used to think about colors and fans, but these days I have a lot of studying to do, so I don't have time to think about the Cloud Gate.

The phrase 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb (think), not the -ing form; 'in today' is incorrect — use 'these days' or 'today'; 'have many hard to study' is ungrammatical and should be 'have a lot of studying to do' or 'have many hard subjects to study'; 'time to thinking' should be 'time to think'; 'cloud gate' is a proper noun (Cloud Gate) and needs capitalization. Suggestions: replace 'thinking' with 'think', use 'these days', restructure the studying phrase as 'have a lot of studying to do', and use 'think about' for the object.

× But in the future, if I have enough time, I will go to singing with friends.

✓ But in the future, if I have enough time, I will go singing with friends.

The verb phrase 'go singing' is the correct structure for describing an activity you will do (go + -ing). 'Go to singing' is incorrect because 'go to' should be followed by a noun or place (go to the concert), not a verb in -ing. Suggestion: use 'go singing' or 'sing with friends'.

× When I was shy.

✓ When I was a child, I was shy.

The original fragment 'When I was shy.' is a sentence fragment and lacks a clear time reference. The question asked about childhood, so 'When I was a child, I was shy.' supplies the expected time frame and completes the sentence. Also ensures past tense consistency.

× I often draw flowers like carnations and sunflowers, usually in a simple garden style.

✓ I often drew flowers like carnations and sunflowers, usually in a simple garden style.

The examiner asked about hobbies when the student was a child, so the past tense 'drew' should be used rather than the present 'draw'. Maintain tense consistency with the time frame 'when I was a child'.

× Seeing picture in storybooks inspired me and drawing made me feel calm and happy.

✓ Seeing pictures in storybooks inspired me, and drawing made me feel calm and happy.

'Seeing picture' is singular where plural 'pictures' is appropriate; also a comma before 'and' improves readability. Ensure plural form for general reference to images and keep past tense 'inspired' and 'made' to match the childhood context.

× Yes I do today I will spend time with drawing when I have a free time because drawing make me stay calm and relax after work I usually draw the.

✓ Yes, I do. Today I spend time drawing when I have free time because drawing makes me feel calm and relaxed after work.

Several issues: run-on sentence needs punctuation; 'spend time with drawing' should be 'spend time drawing' (use gerund without 'with'); 'a free time' should be 'free time' (no article); 'drawing make' must be 'drawing makes' to agree with singular subject (drawing); 'stay calm and relax' should be 'feel calm and relaxed' for natural collocation; remove stray 'the' at end. Suggestions: add punctuation, use correct verb agreement and natural phrases.

× Flowers like carnation or sunflowers, but is the version that compares than the past.

✓ I usually draw flowers like carnations or sunflowers, but it is a different style compared to the past.

Original sentence has wrong article and pluralization ('carnation' -> 'carnations'), missing subject 'I usually draw', and awkward comparative phrasing 'is the version that compares than the past'. Use 'different style compared to the past' or 'different from before' for correct comparison. Also keep tense consistent.

× Like me she often does, but because she has a pet bed called Mickey, so we sometimes talk about and get our bed together.

✓ Like me, she often does, but because she has a pet bed called Mickey, we sometimes talk about it and share the bed.

The phrase 'Like me she often does' needs a comma after the introductory clause; 'so' is redundant with 'but' — choose one conjunction; 'talk about and get our bed together' is unclear—use 'talk about it and share the bed' or 'put our beds together' depending on meaning; pronoun 'it' clarifies reference to the pet bed. Also 'pet bed called Mickey' is fine but ensure clarity. Suggestion: remove redundant conjunctions and add clear pronouns.