爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap doğal ama düzeltilmesi gereken dilbilgisi ve akıcılık sorunları var. Daha kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kullanın, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve bağlaçlarla destekleyici detayları düzenleyin. Örneğin at binmeyi sevme nedeninizi bir veya iki belirgin nedenle ve bir kısa örnekle açıklayın. Ayrıca tekil/çoğul ve sıfat kullanımlarına dikkat edin (ör. “a horse” yerine “horses” ya da “the horse”).

範例: Yes, my favourite hobby is horse riding because I love animals and enjoy being outdoors. For instance, riding helps me relax after a busy week, and I also learn to communicate with the horse through training.

建議: Cümle zamanı ve yapı hataları var; geçmişten söz ederken geçmiş zaman kullanın. Ayrıca cümleleri daha kısa ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla (for example, because, so) birbirine bağlayın. Detay verirken daha spesifik olun: ne tür kartlar, kimden aldınız, ne sıklıkla topladınız gibi.

範例: Yes, I collected Pokémon cards when I was a child. I liked the brightly coloured cards and I often bought them at local shops or received some from my friends as gifts.

建議: Cümle yapısı ve kelime seçimi geliştirilmelidir; "I'm going to shelter" ifadesi belirsiz. Geçmişten beri süregelen bir hobi olduğunda "I've enjoyed X since childhood" gibi doğru zamanı kullanın. Hedefinizden bahsederken daha net örnekler verin (ne tür yardım, hangi eğitim).

範例: Yes, I have volunteered at an animal shelter since I was a child because I enjoy caring for animals. For example, I help feed and groom them, and I hope to use my veterinary studies to support injured animals in the future.

建議: Dilbilgisi ve sözdizimi hataları var (ör. "have a obsession" → "has an obsession", "I have horse" → "I have a horse" veya "I ride horses"). Cümleleri daha doğal hale getirmek için basit bağlaçlar kullanın ve bir kısa örnekle durumu somutlaştırın (nerede, ne sıklıkla).

範例: Yes, we share a love of horses in my family. My grandfather is passionate about them, and we often go to his farm to ride horses together at weekends.

× My favorite hobby is riding a horse because I love animals and horse is really really thoughtful animal.

✓ My favorite hobby is riding horses because I love animals and horses are really thoughtful animals.

'a horse' suggests a single horse; general hobby should use plural 'horses'. Also 'horse is really really thoughtful animal' lacks article and agreement; use 'horses are really thoughtful animals' for plural agreement and natural expression.

× And uh, from my perspective, hobbies are good for all people.

✓ And, from my perspective, hobbies are good for everyone.

'all people' is grammatically acceptable but 'everyone' is more natural. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar correction; tense is correct.

× Yes, when I was a child my favorite hobby is collecting Pokémon cards because I love colorful cards, they are my favorite and I'm every time buying the cards and everywhere and my favorite peoples gave me the cards.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my favorite hobby was collecting Pokémon cards because I loved colorful cards; they were my favorite, and I used to buy the cards all the time and everywhere, and my favorite people gave me the cards.

The time reference 'when I was a child' requires past tense: 'is' -> 'was', 'love' -> 'loved'. 'I'm every time buying' is incorrect; use 'I used to buy' or 'I bought them all the time'. 'peoples' is incorrect plural of 'people'; use 'people'.

× Yes, I'm going to shelter.

✓ Yes, I go to an animal shelter.

'I'm going to shelter' is ambiguous and missing article; likely means 'I go to an animal shelter' (habitual action). Use present simple for habitual actions and include 'an' before 'animal shelter'.

× Since my childhood, this is my hobby.

✓ Since my childhood, this has been my hobby.

'Since my childhood' requires present perfect ('has been') to show continuity from past to present, not simple present 'is'.

× I love petting animals and I love helping them, and my goal is using my education to help animals.

✓ I love petting animals and helping them, and my goal is to use my education to help animals.

Use 'to use' after 'goal is' not 'is using'. Also combine similar verbs with 'and' for conciseness.

× My grandfather have a obsession to horses and I have horse.

✓ My grandfather has an obsession with horses and I have a horse.

Subject-verb agreement: 'grandfather' (singular) requires 'has' not 'have'. 'a obsession' should be 'an obsession'. Preposition 'with' is correct collocation ('obsession with'). 'I have horse' needs an article: 'a horse'.

× I'm doing horse riding and we usually going to farm and riding horse together with my grandfather.

✓ I go horse riding, and we usually go to the farm and ride horses together with my grandfather.

For habitual actions use present simple: 'I go horse riding'. 'we usually going' is missing auxiliary: use 'we usually go'. 'riding horse' should be 'ride horses' and include plural for general activity or 'ride the horse' for a specific animal.