爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "for example", "also") to make it coherent. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: I have a few hobbies that I enjoy in my free time, mainly reading and watching films. For example, I often read self-development and business books like Rich Dad Poor Dad, which taught me about financial management and the right mindset; I also watch films to relax and get new ideas.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and grammar, remove hesitations and repetition, and give one concrete example of a childhood hobby and its benefit. Use a linking word like "because" or "so" to explain reasons.

範例: Yes. As a child I enjoyed reading, especially books about business and communication. Because I read often, my vocabulary and confidence improved, and that early interest eventually shaped my decision to study business.

建議: Give a direct answer, avoid repeating phrases, correct sentence structure, and explain briefly how the hobby has helped you with a specific result. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "so" or "therefore".

範例: Yes, I have kept reading and watching films since childhood. Reading business books in particular has improved my critical thinking and knowledge, so it has helped me plan and work toward my long-term career goals.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar and word choice; explain similarity briefly and give a specific example of how your family member shares the hobby or how it influences you. Use linking words like "because" or "for example".

範例: Yes. My father and I both enjoy reading business books. For example, he reads books to improve his business and communication skills, and we often discuss ideas from those books, which inspires me.

× I have a few hobbies that I really enjoy in my free times.

✓ I have a few hobbies that I really enjoy in my free time.

Use the uncountable noun 'time' in the phrase 'free time' (no plural). Remove plural 'times'. Also 'a few hobbies' is correct. Suggestion: use 'free time' for general periods of leisure.

× I like reading books, specially self development and business related books.

✓ I like reading books, especially self-development and business-related books.

Use 'especially' (adverb) instead of 'specially'. Compound adjectives that modify nouns should be hyphenated: 'self-development' and 'business-related'. This improves clarity and correctness.

× One of the book I like Rich Dad Poor Dad by Robert Kiyosaki which shows the importance of which shows the importance of financial management and mindset.

✓ One of the books I like is Rich Dad Poor Dad by Robert Kiyosaki, which shows the importance of financial management and mindset.

Use plural 'books' after 'one of the' and include the linking verb 'is'. Remove the repeated phrase and add a comma before the relative clause 'which shows...'. This fixes article/number agreement and sentence structure.

× I also like the watching the movies.

✓ I also like watching movies.

Remove the extra definite articles 'the' and reduce 'watching the movies' to 'watching movies'. The verb 'like' is followed by the gerund 'watching' without an article.

× Yes, I had one of the hobby which I remember about my childhood, uh, I that time I also reading books which enhance my communication skills as well as improve my knowledge about, uh, about the business as well, because from my childhood, I am interested in, in business.

✓ Yes, I had one hobby that I remember from my childhood. At that time I also read books that enhanced my communication skills and improved my knowledge about business, because since my childhood I have been interested in business.

Change 'one of the hobby' to 'one hobby' (singular agreement). Use 'that I remember from my childhood' (preposition correction). Use past tense 'read' and 'enhanced/improved' for past habits. Use 'about business' (no article) and 'since my childhood I have been interested' to express continuing interest. This fixes singular/plural, tense, prepositions, and sentence structure.

× As I earlier mentioned, from the childhood to my, my at this stage of my life, I had seen, I have seen hobby reading books and watching movies, which help me to increase is my knowledge and thinking and, uh, thinking, uh, which help which also spot my long term, which also spot to achieve my long term career goals.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, from childhood to this stage of my life, I have had the hobbies of reading books and watching movies, which help me increase my knowledge and thinking and also support me in achieving my long-term career goals.

Use 'mentioned earlier' and 'from childhood to this stage' (clearer phrasing). Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate duration to present. Use 'hobbies of reading' and remove awkward repetitions. Use 'help me increase' and 'support me in achieving' with hyphenated 'long-term'. This corrects tense usage, verb forms, article use, and sentence structure.

× Yes, my father heard have the same hobby. He also like like to reading books, especially business related books, and he is a business owner.

✓ Yes, my father also has the same hobby. He also likes reading books, especially business-related books, and he is a business owner.

Replace incorrect words 'heard have' with 'also has' (subject-verb agreement and proper verb). Use 'likes' (third person singular) and the gerund 'reading' without 'to'. Hyphenate 'business-related'. This fixes preposition/word choice and subject-verb agreement.

× That's why he like the business book which her to increase his business knowledge as well as, uh, their his communication knowledge.

✓ That's why he likes business books to increase his business knowledge as well as his communication skills.

Use 'likes' (third person singular). Replace 'the business book which her to increase' with 'business books to increase' for correct purpose expression. Change 'their his' to 'his' and 'communication knowledge' to 'communication skills' which is more natural. This corrects pronoun errors and word choice.