爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement and articles), reduce fillers, and make the answer slightly more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes. One of my main hobbies is capoeira, a Brazilian martial art. In fact, I work as an assistant teacher at a local academy, so I teach classes once a week, which helps me practice and stay fit.

建議: Correct tense use and word choice, remove extra words and fillers, and give clearer sequence of events. Use past tense consistently, and replace incorrect verbs with accurate ones (e.g., 'quit' or 'stopped practicing').

範例: Yes, I used to play the piano when I was a child. However, after I started junior high school I became very busy with my studies, so I stopped practicing.

建議: Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Give a concise topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking phrase. Remove contractions or unclear fragments.

範例: No, unfortunately I haven't kept most childhood hobbies. As my lifestyle changed and I became busier with work and study, I gradually stopped them.

建議: Fix grammar (plural/singular, word order) and make the response more fluent and organized. Start with a direct answer, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words to explain why.

範例: No, my family and I don't share the same hobbies. I have several hobbies like capoeira, but my family members are mostly focused on work, so they don't pursue hobbies regularly.

× Yes, one of my major hobby is Capoeira, a Brazilian martial art.

✓ Yes, one of my major hobbies is Capoeira, a Brazilian martial art.

The phrase 'one of my major hobby' mixes singular 'one of' which requires a plural noun after 'of'. Use the plural 'hobbies' because 'one of' refers to one item from a group. Suggestion: say 'one of my major hobbies' or rephrase 'My major hobby is...'.

× I am an assistant teacher of capoeira at my Academy, so I teach students, uh, once a week.

✓ I am an assistant teacher of capoeira at my academy, so I teach students once a week.

The sentence is mostly correct grammatically; change 'Academy' to lowercase 'academy' because it is a common noun here. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Note: this issue was treated as present participle/word form cleanup rather than tense change.

× When I was a child while my hobby was playing the piano, but as I get busy in after uh, getting into the junior high school, I quitted praying that.

✓ When I was a child my hobby was playing the piano, but after I got into junior high school I quit practicing it.

Multiple past-tense and word-choice errors: 'while' is unnecessary and creates a fragment; use simple past 'got' not 'get' for a past event; 'quitted' is incorrect — the correct past tense is 'quit'; 'praying' is wrong word choice for playing/practicing piano, use 'practicing' or 'playing'. Also reorder clauses for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use correct verbs: 'after I got into junior high school I quit practicing it.'

× Unfortunately, I quitted most of the hobbies that I had in my childhood.

✓ Unfortunately, I quit most of the hobbies that I had in my childhood.

The verb 'quitted' is nonstandard; the correct past tense and past participle of 'quit' is 'quit'. Keep simple past tense 'quit' to describe a completed action in the past.

× As the lifestyle has changed significantly, I it's changed accordingly.

✓ As my lifestyle has changed significantly, mine has changed accordingly.

The original mixes 'I' and 'it's' causing pronoun/reference errors and awkward structure. Use a clear subject: 'my lifestyle' then refer back: 'mine has changed accordingly' or better: 'my lifestyle has changed significantly, and my hobbies have changed accordingly.' Suggestion: maintain clear subject-pronoun agreement and avoid contractions that break meaning.

× Well I actually do not have the same hobby as my family I am.

✓ Well, I actually do not have the same hobbies as my family.

The sentence has misplaced 'I am' and singular/plural mismatch. Use 'hobbies' (plural) to match 'same hobbies' and remove 'I am' which is extraneous. Also add a comma after 'Well'.

× I have several hobbies to be honest, but my families do not have any hobbies they as far as I remember because they basically busy doing their jobs.

✓ I have several hobbies, to be honest, but my family members do not have any hobbies as far as I remember because they are basically busy doing their jobs.

Errors: 'families' is wrong form; use 'family members' or 'my family'. Word order 'they as far as I remember' is incorrect — move 'as far as I remember' to earlier. Also need the verb 'are' before 'basically busy'. Suggestion: 'my family members do not have any hobbies, as far as I remember, because they are basically busy with their jobs.'