阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like "increase my brain capacity" and redundant clauses. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I love reading. It keeps me informed about current topics and helps me learn different perspectives; for example, reading biographies taught me how successful people made key decisions.

建議: Remove repetition and add a brief reasoned comparison. Start with a clear preference sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using a linking word.

範例: I prefer reading on paper because it feels more comfortable and doesn't tire my eyes; in contrast, prolonged screen use often causes headaches and distractions.

建議: Correct minor grammar (plural/singular) and vary vocabulary slightly. Use a linking word to contrast the two situations and give a brief example of what careful reading involves.

範例: I read very carefully when preparing for exams, presentations or interviews because I need to understand facts and remember key points; however, when I'm reading for pleasure I skim more and focus on the story rather than fine details.

建議: Clarify and avoid unclear expressions (e.g. "involves my Mac"). Start with a clear statement, explain when you use each method, and give a concrete example for each. Use linking words for coherence.

範例: I use both methods depending on the situation: I scan emails or news headlines when I'm short on time, but I read documents or technical instructions in detail—for instance, when I'm installing software on my laptop I read the manual carefully.

× Reading helps me to get more information to keep me updated and also to increase my brain capacity.

✓ Reading helps me to get more information, keep me updated, and increase my brain capacity.

The original sentence used infinitive 'to' repeatedly creating awkward parallelism. After a verb like 'helps', use a parallel structure: either 'to' + verb consistently or the base verb; here using base verbs in a comma-separated list is clearer. Also add a comma before 'and' for readability.

× For example, when I read about a book, I know more about the book and the author and what it is talking about.

✓ For example, when I read a book, I learn more about the book, the author, and what it is about.

The phrase 'read about a book' is unnatural; use 'read a book'. 'Know more about...what it is talking about' is wordy and uses 'talking' incorrectly for inanimate subject; replace with 'what it is about'. Use parallel commas in lists.

× I find I find it comfortable and convenient to read on paper because it doesn't put any stress on my eyes, but using a screen sometimes stresses my eyes and gives me a headache.

✓ I find it comfortable and convenient to read on paper because it doesn't strain my eyes, but reading on a screen sometimes strains my eyes and gives me a headache.

The original repeats 'I find' (duplication error) and mixes 'using a screen' with earlier 'read'; maintain parallel gerund forms ('read on paper' vs 'reading on a screen') and use 'strain' rather than 'put stress on' for natural collocation. Remove duplicated words.

× I read carefully and pay attention to every details when I am preparing for an exam, presentation or interview.

✓ I read carefully and pay attention to every detail when I am preparing for an exam, a presentation, or an interview.

'Every' should be followed by a singular noun ('every detail'), not plural. Also add articles for 'presentation' and 'interview' for parallelism and clarity, and include commas in the list.

× But when I am reading for fun, I do not pay attention to details.

✓ But when I am reading for fun, I do not pay attention to details.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'details' plural is correct here because it refers to unspecified multiple details. No change needed.

× I prefer both reading method depending on the scenario, scanning when it is nothing serious and detailed reading when it is important and it's something that involves my Mac.

✓ I prefer both reading methods depending on the situation: I scan when it is not serious, and I read in detail when it is important or involves my Mac.

'Both reading method' needs plural 'methods'. 'Depending on the scenario' is acceptable but 'situation' is more natural. 'Scanning when it is nothing serious' is unidiomatic; use 'when it is not serious'. 'Detailed reading' can be made 'read in detail'. Also clarify conjunctions and use commas/colon for clarity.