走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct verb forms and pluralization, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example of a walking routine for clarity.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk 30 minutes to work every weekday and take a longer 60‑minute walk in the park on weekends. Walking helps me relax after a busy day and keeps me fit.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence and correct tense and grammar. Remove unnecessary words and use linking words (because/so) accurately. Provide a specific detail (distance, time) to support the answer.

範例: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. My school was about 20 minutes away on foot, so I walked there with friends almost every day, which was a normal routine in my town.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons with correct word choice. Replace vague words like 'feeds' with 'mood' or 'well‑being' and use linking words such as 'because' and 'and'.

範例: People like to walk in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and pleasant scenery, and because walking there improves physical health and lifts their mood.

建議: Answer directly and fix vocabulary and grammar. State the place clearly, give one or two reasons with linking words, and avoid uncertain tense. Use correct place names and descriptive words.

範例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in a national park or a rural area because I enjoy peaceful natural scenery and fresh air, and it helps me feel refreshed.

建議: Be accurate and clear. Use past tense correctly and correct word choices ('went to the park with my young son', 'fed ducks' not 'sold'). Provide one specific detail about the walk.

範例: Yesterday I went for a walk with my young son. We walked to the nearby park and fed some ducks by the pond, which he really enjoyed.

× Oh absolutely I love walking. I do walk a lot on my daily basis.

✓ Oh absolutely I love walking. I walk a lot on a daily basis.

Redundant use of 'do' and incorrect phrase 'on my daily basis'. Use simple present 'I walk' for habitual actions. Replace 'on my daily basis' with idiomatic 'on a daily basis' or 'every day'. Use: 'I walk a lot' or 'I walk a lot on a daily basis.'

× Not only uh, walking to works but also on weekends.

✓ Not only walking to work, but also on weekends.

Incorrect plural 'works' and missing parallel structure. 'To work' is the correct prepositional phrase for commuting; also ensure parallelism: 'Not only X, but also Y.' Use: 'Not only walking to work, but also walking on weekends.'

× I love walking or walking is one of my favorite exercise.

✓ I love walking or walking is one of my favorite exercises.

Count noun 'exercise' requires plural 'exercises' when saying 'one of my favorite ...' Actually better: 'walking is one of my favorite forms of exercise.' Use: 'one of my favorite exercises' or 'one of my favorite forms of exercise.'

× It's also help to release my stress from work.

✓ It also helps to relieve my stress from work.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'helps' (third person singular). Also 'release my stress' is awkward; use 'relieve my stress'. Use: 'It also helps relieve my work-related stress.'

× As I remember when I was a child I went to walk a lot because my home was pretty far from school, so if almost every day I had to walk to school with friends, which is quite a normal routines in my town.

✓ As I remember, when I was a child I walked a lot because my home was pretty far from school, so almost every day I had to walk to school with friends, which was a quite normal routine in my town.

Use simple past 'walked' (habitual past). Remove incorrect 'went to walk'. 'If almost every day' is wrong — use 'almost every day'. 'Routines' should be singular 'routine' and match past tense 'was'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I walked a lot because my home was far from school, so almost every day I walked to school with friends, which was a normal routine in my town.'

× One of the main reasons that most people prefer walking in parks, I think it's because they want to enjoy the environment as well as improve the health and feeds.

✓ One of the main reasons most people prefer walking in parks, I think, is that they want to enjoy the environment as well as improve their health and feel refreshed.

Sentence structure and conjunctions: remove redundant 'that' and fix 'I think it's because' to 'I think is that'. 'Feeds' is incorrect; likely 'feel' or 'fitness'. Also add possessive 'their health'. Suggestion: '...is that they want to enjoy the environment and improve their health.'

× Oh that's good questions.

✓ Oh, that's a good question.

Number agreement: 'questions' should be singular 'question' to match 'that's' (that is). Add an article 'a'. Use: 'That's a good question.'

× I would love to work in a National Park and rural area because I love Zenry Natural and I think I was enjoy the environment.

✓ I would love to walk in a national park and rural areas because I love nature and I think I would enjoy the environment.

Multiple errors: 'work' should be 'walk' to match context; 'a National Park and rural area' -> 'a national park and rural areas' or 'the countryside'. 'Zenry Natural' is likely 'nature'. 'I think I was enjoy' incorrect modal and tense; use 'I think I would enjoy'. Suggestion: 'I would love to walk in a national park or in rural areas because I love nature and I think I would enjoy the environment.'

× Oh, I just went to work with my little sons yesterday.

✓ Oh, I just went for a walk with my little sons yesterday.

Context: question asked where they went for a walk; 'went to work' is wrong. 'Just' and 'yesterday' together is okay but use past simple 'went for a walk'. Use: 'I went for a walk with my little sons yesterday.'

× We walked to the park near my place and we also sold some ducks, which he was very enjoying.

✓ We walked to the park near my place and we also saw some ducks, which he enjoyed very much.

'Sold some ducks' is incorrect verb (likely 'saw'). 'Which he was very enjoying' is ungrammatical; use simple past 'he enjoyed it very much' or 'he enjoyed them very much'. Suggestion: 'We saw some ducks, which he enjoyed very much.'