走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verbs (walk, go), remove repetition, and make sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Watch noun choices (place, not palace) and verb forms (I work → I walk; I love working → I love walking in the evening).

範例: Yes, I walk quite often. For example, I usually walk to nearby shops and meet friends, and in the evenings I like walking because the weather is cooler and the streets are quieter.

建議: Make past habits clear and grammatical: use past tenses consistently (I used to..., after I finished...). Limit hesitation and repetition. Provide one specific detail (what you did) and a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. I used to go out every afternoon after I finished my homework, because I liked walking in the nearby field and playing football with my friends.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and use natural expressions: use 'walk' not 'work', say 'quiet' instead of 'noise free', and explain reasons with linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid unclear phrases like 'reach us'. Give one or two specific reasons.

範例: People often walk in parks because they are quiet and have fresh air, so visitors can relax. For example, families and joggers go there to enjoy greenery and escape city noise.

建議: Correct modal and vocabulary use: say 'I would definitely choose the seaside' or 'a beach'. Use singular/plural agreement (the sound is), and keep sentences concise. Explain why with a clear reason introduced by a linking word (because or since).

範例: If I had the chance, I would definitely take a long walk along the beach because the sound of the waves is calming and the sea air feels very refreshing.

建議: Use correct past or present perfect for recent actions (I went recently / I have recently gone). Fix verb agreement (it has) and reduce repetition. Give one specific detail about the place (which lake, what fruits) to make the answer more concrete.

範例: Recently I went for a walk around a small lake in front of my house. It has a natural environment with many birds, and I even saw fruit trees along the path.

× Yes, I work a lot, especially when I go nearby shops and and meet with my friends.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot, especially when I go to nearby shops and meet my friends.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' which changes meaning; also 'go nearby shops' lacks the preposition 'to' and 'meet with my friends' is better as 'meet my friends'. Subject-verb agreement is fine here, but the main issues are wrong verb choice and missing preposition. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('walk') and include 'to' before locations.

× Then we are working and going another palace.

✓ Then we walk and go to another place.

The progressive 'are working' is inappropriate for habitual action; 'palace' is likely the wrong word for 'place'. Also missing preposition 'to'. Use simple present 'walk' and 'go to' for routines. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct vocabulary.

× Especially I love to working evening because this time environment are so cool and.

✓ Especially I love to work in the evening because the environment at that time is so cool.

After 'love to' use base verb 'work' not 'working'. 'Evening' needs article 'the' and preposition 'in'. 'Environment' is singular so needs 'is' not 'are'. Suggestion: follow 'love to + base verb', include articles and correct subject-verb agreement.

× Yes I did when I was a child. Umm, I used to go outside, especially afternoon after finished my homework.

✓ Yes I did when I was a child. Umm, I used to go outside, especially in the afternoon after finishing my homework.

'Especially afternoon' needs 'in the afternoon' (preposition and article). 'After finished' is incorrect sequence; use gerund 'after finishing' or past perfect 'after I had finished'. Suggestion: use 'in the afternoon' and 'after finishing my homework' for clarity.

× Then I go outside and take a walk and uh play with play in our nearby field.

✓ Then I would go outside, take a walk, and play in the nearby field.

When describing past habitual actions with 'used to' earlier, subsequent verbs should match that past habitual meaning: 'I would' or 'I used to'. The phrase 'play with play' is redundant. Suggestion: use consistent tense and remove repetition.

× People like to work in parks because parks have more comfortable and noise free area.

✓ People like to walk in parks because parks are more comfortable and noise-free.

'Work' should be 'walk' to match context. 'More comfortable' requires linking verb 'are' and 'noise free' should be hyphenated as 'noise-free' and used as adjective. 'Area' is unnecessary. Suggestion: choose correct verb and use proper adjective form.

× People working in parks because they need to relax themselves and reach us.

✓ People go to parks because they need to relax and unwind.

Sentence lacks main verb structure; 'People working in parks' is a fragment. 'Relax themselves and reach us' is unclear; likely intended 'relax and recharge'. Suggestion: use a clear subject-verb form and choose appropriate verbs like 'go to parks' and 'relax'.

× That's why they go to park.

✓ That's why they go to the park.

Missing definite article before 'park' in this general context; use 'the park' or 'parks'. Preposition 'to' is present but article needed. Suggestion: include 'the' for specific or habitual references: 'go to the park'.

× If I had the opportunity, I would choose definitely working sea beach because, uh, sea water sound are really amazing and the fresh air also refreshing ourselves and.

✓ If I had the opportunity, I would definitely choose the seaside because the sound of the sea is really amazing and the fresh air is also refreshing.

'Choose definitely working sea beach' has wrong word order and wrong forms: use 'definitely choose' and 'seaside' or 'beach' with 'the'. 'Sea water sound are' has subject-verb disagreement; 'sound' is singular and needs 'is' and 'the sound of the sea' is clearer. 'Refreshing ourselves' should be 'is refreshing'. Suggestion: correct word order, use proper nouns ('the seaside'), and match subject-verb agreement.

× Recently I go for a walk nearby a lake which is spotted in in front of my house.

✓ Recently I went for a walk near a lake that is located in front of my house.

'Recently' with simple past 'went' is appropriate for a past action—use past tense rather than present 'go'. 'Nearby a lake' should be 'near a lake' and 'spotted in in front of' is incorrect; use 'located in front of'. Suggestion: use past tense with 'recently' and correct prepositional phrases.

× It have a natural environment and birds and also have fruits.

✓ It has a natural environment with birds and also has fruit.

Subject 'it' requires singular verb 'has', not 'have'. 'Also have fruits' should be 'also has fruit' or 'also has fruit trees' depending on meaning. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct noun form ('fruit' uncountable or 'fruits' with context).