钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear fragments and repetition.

範例: Yes, I usually carry several keys. For example, I always have my apartment key and my car key with me, and sometimes a key for my parents' house when I visit my hometown.

建議: Organize the answer into a clear past event with cause and result. Use simple past consistently and correct vocabulary. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore'.

範例: Yes, I lost a bicycle key when I was a child. Because we couldn't open the lock, my father broke the old lock so I could ride the bike again.

建議: Answer directly and give a brief reason with clear language. Use correct verb forms and avoid unrelated comments. If mentioning the city, link it to the reason logically.

範例: No, I don't often forget my keys because I treat them as very important and always check before leaving. Also, since I live in Tokyo, I prefer to be cautious and keep everything secure.

建議: Give a clear opinion and one or two coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and unrelated comments about children. If you mention neighbours' trust, explain briefly why.

範例: No, I don't think it's a good idea because I don't know my neighbours well in Tokyo and I don't feel comfortable leaving my keys with someone I don't trust. However, for families with close neighbours, it can be useful in emergencies.

× Yes I do because I have my apartment keys and car keys. Also my hometown, the apartment K because.

✓ Yes, I do because I have my apartment key and car key. Also my hometown apartment key.

Errors: 'keys' was used where singular 'key' is appropriate if speaker means one key per lock; article usage was inconsistent and fragment 'Also my hometown, the apartment K because' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'my apartment key and car key' if referring to one key for each, include commas and complete the thought 'Also my hometown apartment key.' Keep articles consistent and remove stray words. Note: If the student actually has multiple keys for each, use 'my apartment keys and car keys' but ensure the sentence is complete and clear.

× Yes I have. I have lost bicycle kids in my childhood so my father broken broke the my bicycle's key so I could I could ride on it again.

✓ Yes, I have. I lost my bicycle keys in my childhood, so my father broke the bicycle's lock and made a new key so I could ride it again.

Errors: Multiple issues including incorrect word choice ('kids' instead of 'keys'), wrong verb forms ('have lost' acceptable but 'I have lost bicycle kids' missing articles), repeated words and incorrect past participle use ('broken broke the my'). According to the allowed list, focus on past tense and past participle errors and sentence structure. Suggestion: Use simple past 'I lost' or present perfect 'I have lost' consistently; use correct noun 'keys'; use correct past tense 'broke' for action and 'made' or 'replaced' for creating a new key; remove repetitions and add commas for clarity.

× No, I don't, because for me the key is the most important, so I have never forgot the key in my apartment. Also, Tokyo is very dangerous I think.

✓ No, I don't, because for me the key is the most important, so I have never forgotten the key in my apartment. Also, I think Tokyo is very dangerous.

Errors: 'have never forgot' mixes present perfect auxiliary 'have' with simple past 'forgot' instead of past participle 'forgotten'. This is a present perfect tense error. Also word order in 'Tokyo is very dangerous I think' should place the comment 'I think' before or after as a parenthetical: 'I think Tokyo is very dangerous.' Suggestion: Use 'have never forgotten' for present perfect, and place 'I think' in natural position.

× No, I don't because I live in Tokyo, because I don't know my neighbor's face. But children, it's good things because they are immediately.

✓ No, I don't because I live in Tokyo and I don't know my neighbors' faces. But for children, it can be a good thing because they are nearby.

Errors: 'neighbor's face' is unnatural and uses singular possessive incorrectly; should be 'neighbors' faces' if speaking generally. 'It's good things' mixes singular and plural; use 'it can be a good thing' or 'good things'. 'They are immediately' is incorrect adverb use; likely meant 'they are nearby' or 'they respond immediately'. Suggestion: Use plural possessive for multiple neighbors, match singular/plural for 'thing(s)', and choose correct adverb/adjective like 'nearby' or phrase 'respond immediately'.