钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct vocabulary (keys, not kids) and avoid irrelevant words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: No, I don’t. I usually carry about four or five keys because I need keys for my house, my office, and my bike lock. I don’t think that’s too many, so it’s easy for me to manage.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific example or time if possible. Use correct tense and natural phrasing. If you are unsure about the exact time, say so briefly and provide an approximate time or an example of what happened.

範例: Yes, I have lost my keys once. I don’t remember the exact date, but it was many years ago when I left them on a bus and had to get a spare made the next day.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and then explain your strategy concisely. Use natural linking words like 'because' and avoid filler phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with precise vocabulary (attach, wallet).

範例: No, I rarely lock myself out because I attach my keys to my wallet. Since I always take my wallet when I leave the house, I never forget my keys.

建議: Give a clear opinion and explain the reason with a concise, logical example. Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (teeth?). Use linking words like 'because' and end with a brief alternative if you have one.

範例: I don’t think it’s a good idea to leave keys with a neighbour because it could create responsibility issues if something goes wrong. Instead, I prefer to leave a spare key with a trusted family member or use a secure key safe.

× I care.

✓ I don't remember.

The original 'I care.' is incorrect in this context and likely a mis-speech. It does not answer the question about bringing keys. Replace with 'I don't remember.' or 'I can't remember' to convey uncertainty.

× Probably four or five kids and consider it not too many, but I don't know how many other people carry in an inadequate.

✓ Probably four or five keys and I consider that not too many, but I don't know how many keys other people carry.

'kids' is a wrong word; 'keys' (plural) is intended. 'consider it not too many' lacks subject and should be 'I consider that not too many.' 'carry in an inadequate' is ungrammatical; likely 'carry' followed by object 'keys' and no 'in an inadequate'. Correct by specifying 'how many keys other people carry.' Use plural nouns and include necessary subjects.

× I'm sure I have lost my key in my life, but I don't recall when the last time, I think it was over 30 years ago.

✓ I'm sure I have lost my key at some point in my life, but I don't recall when the last time was; I think it was over 30 years ago.

Use 'at some point in my life' rather than 'in my life' for clarity. The clause 'I don't recall when the last time' lacks the verb 'was' and needs proper clause punctuation. The present perfect 'have lost' is acceptable; add 'was' to complete 'when the last time was.'

× No, I hardly forget my keys and lock myself out because the thing right is I carry my keys with my wallet attached so whenever I go I always take it with me.

✓ No, I hardly ever forget my keys and lock myself out because I always carry my keys attached to my wallet, so whenever I go I take them with me.

'hardly forget' should be 'hardly ever forget' to express rarity. 'the thing right is' is incorrect; use 'the thing is' or 'the reason is.' Use consistent pronouns: 'keys' is plural so use 'them' and 'take them with me.' 'carry my keys with my wallet attached' is unclear; better 'carry my keys attached to my wallet.'

× I don't think it is a good idea, not because I don't trust my neighbors, but because of responsibility.

✓ I don't think it is a good idea, not because I don't trust my neighbors, but because of the responsibility involved.

Add 'the' before 'responsibility' and 'involved' to clarify the reason. 'because of responsibility' is unidiomatic; 'because of the responsibility involved' is natural.

× If something bad happens to my teeth, I'm sure my neighbor may uh, my uh, my neighbor blame on herself, which shouldn't be.

✓ If something bad happens to my property, I'm worried my neighbor might blame herself, which shouldn't happen.

The original mentions 'teeth' likely a speech error; context suggests 'property' or 'house.' Replaced with 'property.' 'may ... blame on herself' is incorrect: use 'might blame herself.' Add 'happen' to complete 'which shouldn't happen.' Remove hesitations 'uh.'

× So I don't do it, rather I will.

✓ So I don't do that; instead, I will not leave my keys with a neighbor.

'rather I will' is incomplete and unclear. Clarify with 'instead, I will not leave my keys with a neighbor.' Ensure the sentence fully expresses the intended refusal.