建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'building' → 'buildings', 'trail' → probably 'tall').

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a large city. For example, our main avenue has several office towers and shopping malls, which were built as the city grew.

建議: Give a direct answer and one clear reason with correct grammar and linking words. Use a complete sentence and avoid fragments. Be specific about occasions or lack of interest/opportunity.

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I rarely travel around the city. Also, I don't own a good camera, so I don't feel motivated to photograph buildings.

建議: Answer directly and give two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'it is the tallest', 'provides') and avoid repeating words. Include one personal reason to make it natural.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa because it is the tallest building in the world at 828 metres. In addition, it would be fascinating to see its observation deck and the mixed-use design, which includes residences, offices and restaurants.

建議: State your opinion clearly, then give one or two specific and coherent reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'limited facilities', 'I do not want to leave my town'). Avoid contradictions and unnecessary repetition.

範例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I grew up in a small town and prefer its quiet atmosphere. Also, my town's close community and familiar amenities make me reluctant to move to a high-rise in a big city.

× Yes, there are many building near my hometown because I live in big city and in my city there are many trail buildings and shopping malls and apartments and along with the industrial development.

✓ Yes, there are many buildings near my hometown because I live in a big city, and in my city there are many tall buildings, shopping malls, and apartments due to industrial development.

Use plural 'buildings' with 'many'. Add article 'a' before 'big city'. 'Trail' is wrong word; likely 'tall'. Use commas to separate items and 'due to' for reason.

× No, I have no take photos of building because I have no opportunity to take photos and because I have no one went to the building. Big buildings.

✓ No, I have not taken photos of buildings because I have not had the opportunity to take photos and because no one has gone to the buildings with me.

Wrong verb form: use present perfect 'have not taken'. Use plural 'buildings'. 'Have no one went' is ungrammatical; correct to 'no one has gone' or 'no one to go with me'. Use 'opportunity' with perfect aspect if referring to experience.

× Yes, I want to visit Burj Khalifa in the way. It is the largest building standard at 828 meters and with the 163 floors and it is also provide features like like apartments, corporations and many other facilities.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the Burj Khalifa someday. It is the tallest building at 828 meters with 163 floors, and it also provides features like apartments, corporate offices, and many other facilities.

Use article 'the' with famous building names. 'In the way' is incorrect; use 'someday' or 'one day'. 'Largest building standard' wrong—use 'tallest'. 'Provide' needs 'provides' (third person singular). 'Corporations' is better as 'corporate offices'. Remove duplicate 'like'.

× No, I do not want to live in tall building because I live in small town and my town has a only limited facilities and I love my town and I do not leave my town.

✓ No, I do not want to live in a tall building because I live in a small town, my town has only limited facilities, and I love my town so I would not leave it.

Use indefinite article 'a' before 'tall building' and 'a small town'. 'Has a only limited facilities' is incorrect: use 'has only limited facilities' or 'has only a few facilities'. 'I do not leave my town' should be 'I would not leave it' to express preference; ensure pronoun reference 'it' for the town.