旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more direct and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), include a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Use correct verb tenses, plural forms, and clearer phrasing (e.g., "I like looking out of the window because I can see local life and nature that I wouldn’t notice otherwise").

範例: Yes. I like looking out of the bus window because I can see green trees and local neighborhoods that I wouldn’t notice on foot. For example, I often spot small markets and street vendors, which gives me a better sense of the area.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer reasons. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid vague phrases and awkward endings.

範例: Yes, I usually take photos and videos while traveling by bus because they help me remember the trip. Also, I can capture scenes—such as unusual buildings or landscapes—that I might miss when I’m walking or driving.

建議: Answer directly naming the sea or mountains, then provide two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer the sea because..."), and avoid vague praise like "Everything is beautiful." Give concrete examples or feelings.

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy spending quality time with family on the beach. For instance, we swim, take photos of the sunset, and listen to the waves, which helps me relax and creates lasting memories.

× Yes, I used to see the green tree and the local places while traveling on the bus because it show or explore the things which can not be done by going there directly.

✓ Yes, I usually see the green trees and local places while traveling by bus because it shows or reveals things that cannot be experienced by going there directly.

The student mixed past habit 'used to' with present description; the question asks about current habit so use present simple 'usually see'. 'Green tree' should be plural 'green trees' to match general reference (singular/plural issue). Use 'traveling by bus' without 'on'. 'It show' is subject-verb agreement error; 'it shows' or better 'it shows or reveals' to make meaning clear. Use 'cannot' instead of 'can not' and 'experienced' is more natural than 'done by going there directly'. Replace 'which' with 'that' for restrictive clause.

× Yes, I usually take photos and videos when I was traveling by bus because that was a memory for me and exploring the things which I cannot explore while walking and driving.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos and videos when I travel by bus because they are memories for me and allow me to see things I cannot explore while walking or driving.

Mixing past tense 'was traveling' with present habit 'usually take' is incorrect; use present simple 'when I travel' to match habitual action. 'That was a memory for me' should be plural and present: 'they are memories for me'. 'Exploring the things which I cannot explore' is awkward; use 'allow me to see things I cannot explore'. Use 'or' to connect 'walking or driving'. Maintain consistent tense and clearer verb choice.

× So that will be a good.

✓ So that is good.

The original fragment 'So that will be a good' is ungrammatical and vague. The phrase 'will be' unnecessarily shifts to future; the student is making a general statement, so present simple 'is' is correct. 'A good' requires a noun (a good what?), so remove article and use 'good' as adjective: 'So that is good.' Alternatively, specify a noun: 'So that is a good idea.'

× I prefer C because there I can spend a quality time with my family and friends.

✓ I prefer C because I can spend quality time there with my family and friends.

'Spend a quality time' is incorrect; 'quality time' is an uncountable noun and does not need the article 'a'. Word order is awkward; place 'there' after 'time' or before 'with'—'spend quality time there with my family and friends' is natural. Also move 'there' to a more natural position.

× Also I can get some pictures, beautiful views and the waves which is coming from the sea and the endless water.

✓ Also I can take some pictures of the beautiful views and the waves that come from the sea and the endless water.

'Get some pictures' is acceptable but 'take some pictures of' is more idiomatic. 'Beautiful views' is fine. 'The waves which is coming' has a subject-verb agreement error: 'waves' plural requires 'come' not 'is coming'. Use 'that come' or 'which come' for the relative clause; 'that' is preferred for restrictive clauses. 'Endless water' is odd; keep it if intended, but 'the endless sea' or 'the endless expanse of water' would be clearer. Adjusted sentence for natural word order.

× Everything is beautiful.

✓ Everything there is beautiful.

The original sentence is grammatically correct but could be more specific by adding 'there' to link to the place being discussed. If left alone it is acceptable, but adding 'there' improves coherence with previous sentence about location.