旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep your answer focused and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and unclear phrases (e.g., "natural and a weave person", "wheel landscape"). Use simple past or present continuous correctly ("when I travel" not "when I traveling").

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car. For example, on train journeys I enjoy watching the countryside pass by because the changing fields and villages are relaxing. Also, I sometimes take photos of interesting scenes so I can remember the trip.

建議: Be concise and correct in grammar. Answer directly, then give a specific reason and one brief detail. Reduce hesitation words ("umm", "uh") and correct verb forms: "I usually take photos and videos when I travel". Use a linking phrase like "because" to explain purpose.

範例: Yes, I usually take photos and videos when I travel by train or bus because I like to review the scenery later. For instance, I record coastal views on train trips so I can watch them again and show friends.

建議: Answer directly and give two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar ("the sea" not "sea", "swimming improves my muscles"). Avoid vague endings like "and I think." Keep to 2–3 sentences and include an example or result to strengthen your point.

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. For example, swimming helps me stay fit and I often spend my free afternoons doing laps, which improves my strength and mood.

× I really love this question because I am a natural and a weave person.

✓ I really love this question because I am a natural and a creative person.

The original uses 'weave' incorrectly as an adjective; likely intended meaning is 'creative' or similar. Replace the incorrect adjective with an appropriate one. Suggestion: choose a clear descriptive adjective that fits context (creative, curious, or observant).

× I really love to watch outside when I traveling especially with trains and the buses is really nice to especially takes the photo of the wheel landscape.

✓ I really love to watch outside when I am traveling, especially on trains; the buses are also nice and I especially like taking photos of the scenery.

Multiple verb form and structure errors: 'traveling' needs an auxiliary (am) for present continuous; 'buses is' has wrong verb agreement and should be 'buses are'; 'takes the photo' uses wrong verb form—use gerund 'taking' after like. Split into clearer clauses and use correct auxiliary and plural verb agreement.

× It's really nice I really love it.

✓ It's really nice; I really love it.

This sentence needs punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Grammatically it's acceptable, but adding a semicolon or period improves readability. No verb form change required.

× Yes, I usually do this umm activity as I mentioned before, uh, I really love take some photos and took some videos when I traveling, especially with the trains and bus because I want to watch my videos after my traveling, after my trips.

✓ Yes, I usually do this activity, as I mentioned before. I really love taking photos and recording videos when I am traveling, especially on trains and buses, because I want to watch my videos after my trips.

Problems: 'love take' should be 'love taking' (verb + -ing after 'love' for habitual actions); 'took some videos' mixes past with present habit—use 'recording' or 'taking videos'; 'when I traveling' needs auxiliary 'am'; use plural 'buses' to match context; 'after my traveling' is awkward—use 'after my trips'.

× Actually, I prefer to go to the sea because I love swimming.

✓ Actually, I prefer going to the sea because I love swimming.

Both 'prefer to go' and 'prefer going' are possible; 'prefer going' sounds more natural when speaking of a general preference. This is a stylistic improvement rather than strict grammar correction.

× I love sea and I love the blue color.

✓ I love the sea and I love the color blue.

Missing article 'the' before 'sea'; adjective order: 'the color blue' is the correct noun phrase. Also add 'the' before 'sea' for specificity.

× It is really my spare time activity and I believe that swimming improve my muscles.

✓ It is really my spare-time activity, and I believe that swimming improves my muscles.

'Spare time' used as a compound adjective should be hyphenated when before a noun ('spare-time activity'). Subject-verb agreement: 'swimming improve' needs 'improves' to agree with singular subject 'swimming'.

× I found swimming is healthy and I think.

✓ I find that swimming is healthy, I think.

Tense inconsistency: speaker uses 'found' (past) but is expressing a general opinion—use present 'find'. Also add 'that' for clarity: 'I find that swimming is healthy.' Ending with 'I think' is redundant; if kept, place it after the clause and add a comma.