旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or short example using a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing like “which I really find.”

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the changing scenery relaxes me. For example, I enjoy watching trees and small villages pass by, which helps me feel calm during long trips.

建議: Provide a clearer response with correct grammar and a brief explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a concrete example of when you take photos. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like “GI gives me.”

範例: Sometimes I take photos of landscapes and the countryside, especially when the light is beautiful. For instance, I often stop to photograph golden fields at sunset because the colours look amazing in pictures.

建議: Give a direct preference statement, then support it with specific reasons. Fix grammar and remove irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g. “high heels”). Use a linking word like “because” and include a concrete detail about what you enjoy in the mountains.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and exploring remote trails. For example, I like climbing to viewpoints to see wide valleys and fresh air, which makes me feel energized and peaceful.

× Yes, I usually look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because it gives me excitement and peace, which I really find.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because it gives me excitement and peace, which I really enjoy.

The original sentence uses 'find' incorrectly in this context. Native speakers say 'enjoy' to express pleasure from something. This is not a tense error but a wrong verb choice; however it most directly affects present-tense meaning. Suggest replacing 'find' with 'enjoy' to convey the intended meaning clearly. Also ensure 'traveling' (American) or 'travelling' (British) is consistent with your variety. ID:6

× Sometimes I would like to take a photo of landscapes and countryside area. They are fun GI gives me. Exciting.

✓ Sometimes I like to take photos of landscapes and the countryside. It is fun and exciting and gives me pleasure.

Multiple issues: 'would like' suggests a conditional desire rather than a habitual action; for regular habit use present simple 'like'. 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when referring to more than one. 'Countryside area' is awkward; use 'the countryside'. The fragment 'They are fun GI gives me. Exciting.' is ungrammatical: pronoun reference is unclear. Combine into a single complete sentence: 'It is fun and exciting and gives me pleasure.' This corrects pronoun and sentence structure errors. ID:12

× I prefer the mountains rather than sea because I'm quite adventurous person and always like to natural scenery high heels which gives me pleasure.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I'm quite an adventurous person and I always like natural scenery, which gives me pleasure.

Several errors: use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X rather than Y' for preferences. Missing article 'the' before 'sea'. Missing article 'an' before 'adventurous person'. Verb phrase 'always like to natural scenery high heels' is ungrammatical and seems to contain wrong words ('high heels' is irrelevant). Replace with 'I always like natural scenery'. Add comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which gives me pleasure'. Overall fix addresses conjunction/structure and article/pronoun issues. ID:16