旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and a natural, concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes because they help me relax during long journeys.

建議: Reduce hesitation and repetition, choose precise vocabulary, and organise ideas with linking words. Start with a direct answer, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid filler sounds.

範例: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like preserving beautiful views. For instance, last month I photographed a colorful sunset while driving along the coast.

建議: Give a clear preference sentence, correct grammar (articles, verb forms), and provide a specific reason using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and filler sounds.

範例: I prefer the sea because I find the ocean views more relaxing and vibrant. For example, I enjoy listening to the waves and watching the changing colours at sunset, which I find more calming than mountain scenery.

× Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car.

The verb after 'when' should be in the base present tense form 'travel' to match the subject 'I' and present time frame. 'I traveling' is incorrect because English requires the base verb after 'when' in simple present statements. Suggestion: use 'I travel' for simple habitual actions.

× Yeah, sometimes I take a picture of the finery outside the car window because I, uh, like to, uh, I, I, I like to shoot the scenery.

✓ Yeah, sometimes I take pictures of the fine scenery outside the car window because I like to shoot the scenery.

Two issues: 'a picture' can be plural 'pictures' to match 'sometimes' (repeated action), and 'finery' is a noun meaning fancy clothing or decoration; the correct adjective/noun is 'fine scenery' or simply 'scenery'. Also remove filler repetitions. Suggestion: use 'take pictures' for habitual photographing and 'fine scenery' or just 'scenery'.

× The scenery is actually charming.

✓ The scenery is actually charming.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct. Kept as is.

× So when I travel, I try to shoot that scenery.

✓ So when I travel, I try to photograph that scenery.

Original 'try to shoot' is understandable but 'shoot' can be ambiguous; 'photograph' is more precise. Grammatically 'try to' + base verb is correct. Suggestion: use clearer verb 'photograph'.

× I always prefer sea cause, uh, the scenery of the scenario of seas absolutely uh, charming.

✓ I always prefer the sea because the scenery of the sea is absolutely charming.

Problems: missing article before 'sea' — use 'the sea' for a general preference; 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech; 'the scenery of the scenario of seas' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'the scenery of the sea' or 'the sea scenery'. Suggestion: say 'I always prefer the sea because the sea scenery is absolutely charming.'

× For me that wave of the sea is sometimes feels better uh, than mountains.

✓ For me, the waves of the sea sometimes feel better than the mountains.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form error: 'that wave of the sea is sometimes feels' mixes 'is' and 'feels'. Use plural 'waves' with plural verb 'feel' to match, or singular 'the wave... feels'. Also include commas for clarity and add 'the' before 'mountains' for comparison. Suggestion: 'the waves of the sea sometimes feel better than the mountains.'