打字— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., 'technology is expanding' or 'with modern technology'), and give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase to make it coherent.

範例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient with modern technology. For example, I can quickly edit and share documents online, which saves time compared with handwriting.

建議: Answer directly and organize information: begin with a clear sentence saying which device you use most, then give a specific reason. Remove hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., 'needs to be processed on a desktop').

範例: I mostly type on my mobile phone, but I also use a desktop for work and study. Because my job involves processing large spreadsheets and documents, I use the desktop when I need more screen space and a full keyboard.

建議: Provide a clear timeline and concise detail: start with the time (grade) and briefly describe how you learned, using smoother phrasing and linking words. Avoid redundancy ("back" and "back in").

範例: I learned to type in the third grade as part of our ICT curriculum. The teacher demonstrated touch-typing techniques and we practiced regularly with exercises and games.

建議: Give a direct answer then specific methods: state who helped and list concrete practice activities, using correct verbs (e.g., 'type up' instead of 'encode') and linking words. Keep it within a few sentences.

範例: I improved my typing with help from my father, who encouraged me to type up books I had read. For example, I regularly type short chapters and articles to build speed and familiarity with the keyboard.

× Typing is way more convenient for me as technology nowadays or expanding.

✓ Typing is way more convenient for me as technology nowadays is expanding.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'is' before 'expanding', causing a present continuous tense error. Use 'is expanding' to indicate an ongoing change. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'to be' for present continuous verbs.

× And handwriting is uh, much more complex activity other than typing.

✓ Handwriting is a much more complex activity than typing.

The sentence misorders words and omits the article 'a'. Use 'a much more complex activity' and the comparative structure 'than typing' instead of 'other than typing'. Suggestion: place the article before the noun and use 'than' for comparisons.

× Umm. In other words, uh, typing is way more accessible and faster to do rather than handwriting that takes a long time.

✓ In other words, typing is much more accessible and faster to do than handwriting, which takes a long time.

Use 'than' for comparisons (not 'rather than' in this context) and add 'which' to introduce the relative clause about handwriting. Also replace informal 'way' with 'much' for more natural academic style. Suggestion: use 'than' for comparisons and connect clauses with 'which' or a comma.

× More likely in a mobile phone, but sometimes I do type 1 umm certain desktop for my work and studies mostly everyday since my work includes a lot of processing details that needs to be processed in a desktop.

✓ I am more likely to type on a mobile phone, but sometimes I type on a desktop for work and study, mostly every day, since my work includes many processing tasks that need to be done on a desktop.

Multiple issues: prepositions should be 'type on' not 'in', use 'on a desktop', and 'every day' is two words. 'Needs' should be 'need' to agree with plural 'tasks'. Use 'many processing tasks' instead of 'a lot of processing details'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for devices, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose clearer nouns.

× I learned way back in 3rd grade I it was a part of a requirement in my ICT class back in grade school.

✓ I learned back in third grade; it was part of the requirements in my ICT class at grade school.

Redundant words and punctuation needed. Use 'learned' (past) correctly, remove extra 'I', and 'part of the requirements' fits better than 'a part of a requirement'. Also write 'third grade' in words for clarity. Suggestion: remove filler words and fix punctuation to separate clauses.

× My teacher did perform a comprehensive illustration on how to do it.

✓ My teacher gave a comprehensive demonstration on how to do it.

'Did perform a comprehensive illustration' is awkward; use 'gave a comprehensive demonstration' or 'provided a clear demonstration'. 'Illustration' is usually visual; 'demonstration' suits showing how to type. Suggestion: choose verbs and nouns that collocate naturally.

× That is actually a good question on how I improve my typing is by the guidance of my father.

✓ That is actually a good question; I improved my typing with guidance from my father.

Original mixes a noun clause and statement awkwardly. Use past tense 'improved' if referring to past improvement, and 'with guidance from my father' is natural. Suggestion: split into two clauses and use correct preposition 'with'.

× He told me to encode the books I have done reading and to the laptop so I could practice my typing and memorize the keyboard itself.

✓ He told me to type the books I had finished reading into the laptop so I could practice typing and memorize the keyboard.

'Encode' is an incorrect verb here; use 'type' or 'input'. 'Have done reading' should be 'had finished reading' to show past-before-past sequence. Use 'into the laptop' rather than 'to the laptop'. Remove redundant 'itself'. Suggestion: use precise verbs, correct past perfect for sequence, and proper prepositions.