视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar, and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid repetition, correct verb forms, and finish your thought. Use one or two brief supporting details linked with a simple connector. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often drive along the beach and take photos of the sea and sky from the car window, which I find very relaxing.

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, such as). Correct noun/verb agreement and avoid filler words. Keep sentences complete and finish your idea.

範例: I prefer rural views because nature is more beautiful there. For example, scenes with trees, lakes and flowers, especially at sunrise or sunset, create a peaceful and relaxing atmosphere.

建議: Clarify and correct language errors, and complete the explanation. Start with a direct answer, give a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid fragmented sentences and incorrect words. Use linking phrase like 'because' and finish the example.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I am used to the scenery at home and it no longer feels exciting. For instance, when I travel abroad I enjoy photographing distinctive architecture and unfamiliar streets.

× Yeah, I do really like steak likes to take photos.

✓ Yeah, I really like to take photos.

The sentence contains a pronoun/word misuse and redundant verbs: 'steak likes' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation. Remove the extraneous word and use 'I really like to take photos' to correctly express the subject and verb. Suggestion: speak/write clearly to avoid inserting unrelated words and keep subject-verb structure simple.

× For example, I likes to drive along the beach, so I took the I took the photos of scenery from the car windows.

✓ For example, I like to drive along the beach, so I took photos of the scenery from the car windows.

'I likes' uses third person singular verb form with first person subject; correct form is 'I like' (Grammar Problem Type 2). Also 'I took the I took the' is a repetition; remove duplicate. 'photos of scenery' should be 'photos of the scenery' for natural reference. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid repeating phrases; include definite article 'the' before 'scenery' when referring to specific scenery.

× This just a relaxing and.

✓ This is just relaxing.

The sentence lacks a verb and ends abruptly (Grammar Problem Type 23 and 26). Add the verb 'is' and remove the dangling conjunction 'and' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: always include a main verb and complete the thought; if adding an adjective use 'is' (This is relaxing) or finish the list after 'and'.

× Umm, in my case, I prefer uh, rural area because the beauty, the nature is more beautiful and for example, like the mixture of trees, lake and flowers and a good sunset and sunrise gives me, gives me relaxing, uh, atmosphere and very.

✓ Umm, in my case, I prefer rural areas because nature is more beautiful; for example, the mix of trees, lakes and flowers and a nice sunset or sunrise gives me a relaxing atmosphere.

Multiple issues: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general preference (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'the nature is more beautiful' should be 'nature is more beautiful' (article use). 'the mixture of trees, lake and flowers' needs plural 'lakes' and a clearer structure. 'gives me, gives me relaxing, uh, atmosphere and very' is repetitive and incomplete. Use 'gives me a relaxing atmosphere' with correct article and noun form (Grammar Problem Types 1 and 22 and 11). Suggestion: use plurals for general categories, remove filler words, and use 'a relaxing atmosphere' to express the feeling.

× I prefer a bill I abuse in other country 'cause I get used to the scenery of my own country, so no longer exciting for me.

✓ I prefer to travel in other countries because I am used to the scenery of my own country, so it is no longer exciting for me.

Original contains many mistakes: 'a bill I abuse' is unintelligible and likely mispronounced. 'in other country' needs plural 'in other countries' or 'in another country' (Grammar Problem Type 22). Use continuous/ state expression 'I am used to' (passive/present perfect participle) rather than 'I get used to'. Also add 'it is' before 'no longer exciting' to form a complete clause (Grammar Problem Type 23). Suggestion: use 'I prefer to travel in other countries' or 'in another country' and 'I am used to' to indicate habituation.

× So whenever I travel abroad I enjoy taking the architecture of.

✓ So whenever I travel abroad, I enjoy photographing architecture.

The phrase 'taking the architecture of' is ungrammatical; use 'photographing architecture' or 'taking photos of architecture' to convey the action (Grammar Problem Type 26). Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'take photos of' or 'photograph' followed by the object noun without 'the' unless referring to specific architecture.