视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a concise direct topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase if you add extra information. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, when I travel I often photograph city skylines or seaside sunsets to remember how each place felt.

建議: Start with a clear preference or balanced statement, remove hesitations and repetitive phrases, and provide specific details with linking words to explain why. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary.

範例: I enjoy photographing both urban and rural scenes, but I am especially drawn to rural views because of their natural beauty. For instance, I like capturing wide green fields, grazing cows and the texture of crops, which create peaceful and timeless images.

建議: Give a direct answer first, avoid vague statements like “I love my country” without explanation, and add one specific reason or example connected with a linking word. Keep responses short and varied in vocabulary.

範例: I prefer photographing scenes in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes. For example, I often photograph rural fields at sunset—the warm light on the crops and the peaceful atmosphere make those images very meaningful to me.

× I really like to take pictures of different views and whenever I go everywhere, I love to take pictures and, uh, and I think it is the best way to capture the moment to like, uh, capture the moment, yeah.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views, and whenever I go anywhere I love taking pictures because I think it is the best way to capture the moment.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by a gerund when describing hobbies or preferences (like taking). Using 'to take' is not incorrect but repeating both forms and the phrase 'capture the moment to like capture the moment' is redundant and ungrammatical. Also 'everywhere' is too broad; 'anywhere' fits the intended meaning. Suggest using a gerund, removing repetitions, and simplifying the sentence for clarity.

× in the rural areas, I love to, uh, for example, in rural areas, I love to take the pictures of, uh, fields and, uh, the greenery, the, uh, and all, and the cows and the all things.

✓ In rural areas, for example, I love to take pictures of the fields, the greenery, the cows, and other things.

The original repeats phrases and uses 'the pictures of' awkwardly; 'take pictures of' is the natural collocation. The article 'the' before 'all things' is ungrammatical; use 'other things' instead. Remove redundant repetitions and unnecessary fillers for a clearer sentence structure.

× And, uh, for example, when I go at the fields, I love to take the pictures of, uh, greenery and the fields and crops and, and, as well as the sunset, which give me so much peace.

✓ For example, when I go to the fields, I love to take pictures of the greenery, the crops, and the sunset, which gives me so much peace.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'go' (go to the fields), not 'at'. Use 'take pictures of' rather than 'take the pictures of'. Also maintain subject-verb agreement: 'sunset' is singular, so use 'gives' rather than 'give'. Remove redundant repetition for clarity.

× the sunset, which give me so much peace.

✓ the sunset, which gives me so much peace.

The relative clause refers to the singular noun 'sunset', so the verb should be singular 'gives' not plural 'give'. Ensure the verb agrees with its antecedent in number.