视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid small errors (article use, plural), and add one specific detail with a linking phrase. Keep answers under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when the light is beautiful. For example, I often take pictures of sunsets and mountain landscapes because the warm colours create memorable scenes. As a result, I can preserve those moments and look back on them later.

建議: Make a clear topic sentence, fix grammar and run-on sentences, and use linking words to organize reasons. Give one or two specific details rather than a long combined sentence.

範例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is more open and peaceful. For instance, you can see wide fields, rivers and mountain ranges, so I often feel relaxed after spending long periods in a busy city.

建議: Be concise and correct grammar: use a clear contrast structure and correct verb forms. Provide a specific example and explain the emotion briefly. Avoid repetition and keep it within five sentences.

範例: I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad, but I prefer those at home because they feel more familiar and meaningful. For example, the mountains and old streets remind me of childhood holidays, which makes those scenes emotionally significant to me.

× For example, I often take a pictures of sunsets and mountains.

✓ For example, I often take pictures of sunsets and mountains.

The noun 'pictures' is plural and does not need the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' to correct the article usage and form a grammatically correct plural noun phrase.

× Yes I do, especially the light is nice and the view is special.

✓ Yes, I do, especially when the light is nice and the view is special.

The original sentence incorrectly links clauses without an appropriate conjunction or subordinating word. Adding 'when' clarifies the condition under which the speaker likes taking pictures. Also add commas after interjections for clarity.

× I think it can capture some memories.

✓ I think they can capture memories.

The pronoun 'it' is ambiguous because 'pictures' (plural) was referenced; use 'they' to agree in number. Also 'some' before 'memories' is optional; removing it makes the sentence more natural.

× Well, I think I prefer rural areas because there are many places like the countryside's more open and calm, you can see fields and mountains or rivers there and also you can relax yourself after spending a lot of time in busy city.

✓ Well, I think I prefer rural areas because there are many places where the countryside is more open and calm; you can see fields, mountains or rivers there, and you can relax after spending a lot of time in a busy city.

Multiple problems: incorrect use of possessive 'countryside's' (should be a clause 'where the countryside is'), and missing article before 'busy city' (needs 'a busy city'). Also 'relax yourself' is unnecessary reflexive use; 'relax' is sufficient. Added punctuation and conjunctions to improve sentence structure.

× Well actually I enjoy both. Views in my own country feel more familiar however, and it also emotionally meaningful.

✓ Well, actually I enjoy both. Views in my own country feel more familiar, however, and they are also emotionally meaningful.

The clause lacks a verb 'are' to link subject and adjective; 'it' is incorrect for plural 'views' so use 'they'. Commas added around 'however' for clarity.

× For example the mountains and streets reminded childhood.

✓ For example, the mountains and streets reminded me of my childhood.

The verb 'reminded' requires an object (who was reminded) and the phrase 'of my childhood' is the correct prepositional phrase. Added 'me' as the object and 'of my childhood' to express the idea.

× So I feel the views in my own country more especially.

✓ So I especially prefer the views in my own country.

The original word order is awkward. Use 'especially' before the verb phrase and 'prefer' to clearly express the comparison. This fixes sentence structure and makes it natural.