视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and grammatical errors, give a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Focus on verb forms and articles, and avoid repeating fillers like "uh".

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed Mount Fuji because its size and symmetry attracted my attention. I also took candid shots of visitors enjoying the area, which helped me capture the atmosphere.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, reduce hesitation, and use plural/singular and articles correctly. Add one or two specific examples and a linking word to make the reason clear and coherent.

範例: I prefer taking pictures in rural areas rather than urban ones. This is because rural areas offer many breathtaking scenes, such as wide green fields and traditional wooden houses, which create a peaceful, photogenic atmosphere.

建議: Avoid starting with filler phrases like "Wow" and use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, prepositions). Give a clear preference or balanced view, then support it with a specific example and linking words for clarity.

範例: I like both, but if I must choose I prefer photographing views in other countries because they offer new and unique scenes. For example, in Japan I photographed Mount Fuji, which provided a dramatic and different landscape compared to places at home.

× Yes uh, when I do travelling, I do, I try to take a some picture.

✓ Yes, when I travel, I try to take some pictures.

The original uses 'do travelling' which is incorrect; the correct verb is 'travel' (base form) and when expressing habits use 'travel' or 'am travelling'. Also 'a some picture' mixes an indefinite article with a plural quantifier; use 'some pictures' for plural or 'a picture' for singular. Suggestion: use 'I travel' or 'when I am travelling' and 'some pictures' for multiple photos. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× For example, uh, when I went to Japan, I take a Fuji mountain because it attract uh, my attention.

✓ For example, when I went to Japan, I took a picture of Mount Fuji because it attracted my attention.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency and article/name formatting. 'I went' (past) requires 'I took' (past) not 'I take'. 'a Fuji mountain' is unnatural; the proper name is 'Mount Fuji' and you take 'a picture of' it. 'it attract my attention' needs past tense 'attracted'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct name and preposition 'picture of'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I also uh take a picture uh, people who visited this.

✓ I also took a picture of the people who were visiting it.

Tense and verb forms: match past tense 'took' with earlier past context. Use 'a picture of' not 'a picture people'. Also use 'people who were visiting it' or 'people who visited it' for clarity. Suggestion: use past tense and include the preposition 'of' to link 'picture' and subject. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× I prefer taking picture in rural area rather than urban area.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas rather than urban areas.

Countable noun 'picture' needs plural 'pictures' to match general preference. 'rural area' and 'urban area' are being discussed in general, so plural 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' or use 'the rural area'/'the urban area' with an article. Suggestion: use plural forms for general statements. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Uh, this is because in rural area I can, I can find, uh, many, uh, breathtaking views such as umm, uh, green space, uh, the traditional, uh, house.

✓ This is because in rural areas I can find many breathtaking views such as green spaces and traditional houses.

Pluralize 'rural area' to 'rural areas' for general meaning and pluralize 'green space' and 'house' to 'green spaces' and 'traditional houses' to match 'many'. Remove filler words and repeated 'I can'. Suggestion: keep nouns consistent with 'many' by using plural forms and avoid redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Wow, it's a difficult question. Uh, but I think that I like both.

✓ Wow, that's a difficult question, but I think I like both.

Minor phrasing: 'it's a difficult question' is fine, but 'but I think that I like both' has an unnecessary 'that' and awkward rhythm. Use 'that's' and remove extra filler. Tense is present and appropriate. Suggestion: streamline to natural spoken phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, I believe that every country have their unique, uh, things.

✓ I believe that every country has its unique things.

Subject-verb agreement: 'every country' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Pronoun agreement: 'every country' is singular, so use 'its' rather than 'their'. Suggestion: use singular verb and singular possessive pronoun with 'every'. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× So, uh, I can take a picture for their, uh, unique things such as, uh, in Japan, I can take a picture about mountain.

✓ So I can take pictures of their unique things. For example, in Japan I can take pictures of mountains.

Use 'take a picture of' or 'take pictures of' not 'take a picture for' or 'take a picture about'. Also pluralize 'pictures' and 'mountains' for general contexts. Break into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use the preposition 'of' after 'picture' and match plurality to the general statement. Grammar problem type ID: 11