视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap akıcı ama dilbilgisi, kelime seçimi ve mantıksal yapı açısından gelişmeye ihtiyacı var. Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi kur, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici cümle ekle. Örneğin fiil formlarına ve artikel kullanımına dikkat et ("enjoyable to taking" yerine "I enjoy taking"; "in the abroad" yerine "abroad"). Ayrıca tekrarları azalt ve anlamı netleştirmek için bağlaçlar kullan: "because" veya "so" gibi.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photographs of different views because it energizes me and preserves special memories. For example, when I travel abroad I like to photograph cityscapes and landscapes so I can look back on those moments later.

建議: Cevap kısa fakat karışık ve anlaşılması güç; kelime hataları ve tekrarlar fazla. Önce net bir tercih bildir (örneğin "both"), sonra kısa bir sebep ver; sebebi desteklemek için bir örnek veya karşılaştırma ekle. Yanlış kelimeleri düzelt ("wives" → "views"; "it's bad" gereksizse çıkar). Bağlaçlar kullanarak mantığı açık tut: "because", "while" veya "and".

範例: Actually, I prefer both. Urban views offer interesting architecture and busy streets, while rural views give peaceful scenery and natural light, so I enjoy photographing both for different moods.

建議: Cevapta fikir var ama dilsel karışıklık ve mantık hataları var. Önce açık bir tercihi söyle (örneğin "I prefer views in other countries"), sonra nedenini net bir cümleyle destekle. Gereksiz dolgu sözcüklerini çıkar, anlamı güçlendirmek için spesifik örnek ver (örneğin farklı mimari veya manzaralar). Ayrıca "memorized" yerine "remember" veya "preserve" gibi doğru fiilleri kullan.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer a variety of landscapes and architectural styles I don't see at home. For instance, I enjoy photographing colorful markets abroad and contrasting them with the quieter scenes from my country.

× I really do because it makes me more energetic and enjoyable to taking photos, especially in the abroad.

✓ I really do because taking photos makes me feel more energetic and happy, especially abroad.

The original sentence uses adjectives/adverbs incorrectly and has awkward word order. 'Energetic' and 'enjoyable' were misapplied; 'enjoyable' describes something, not how the speaker feels. 'to taking' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'taking' as the subject. 'in the abroad' is incorrect; use 'abroad' without an article. Suggestion: Place the gerund phrase 'taking photos' as the subject or after 'because', use 'makes me feel' + adjective, and drop the article before 'abroad'.

× I really like it because I can keep some memories from there and I really like to do looked at.

✓ I really like it because I can keep memories from there and I really like looking at them.

Pronouns and verb forms are incorrect. 'Keep some memories from there' is acceptable but 'some' can be omitted; use 'memories from there'. 'to do looked at' is ungrammatical: use the gerund 'looking at' and refer back to 'memories' with the object pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: Use correct gerund forms and matching pronouns for clarity.

× Actually both, because both might be have some have some good wives and it can be really affected on the picture that I that I take and it's bad, I think.

✓ Actually both, because both can have good views and that can really affect the pictures I take, which I think is good.

Sentence structure and word choice are incorrect. 'Might be have some have some good wives' is garbled; likely intended 'can have good views' (not 'wives'). 'It can be really affected on the picture' is incorrect passive/preposition use; use active form 'that can really affect the pictures I take'. 'It's bad, I think' contradicts likely meaning; replace with 'which I think is good' if positive. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb-object order, correct word choice ('views'), and correct verb forms.

× Actually in another country because I like, as I said, I like can't pick, uh, different pictures from different countries because it's try umm, it's hard for me to keep memorized it and I know my country band, but I like to explore another country with any waves.

✓ Actually in another country, because, as I said, I can't pick a favorite; different countries offer different photos. It's hard for me to remember them all, and I know my own country well, but I like to explore other countries for new views.

Many pronoun and word choice errors: 'I like can't pick' should be 'I can't pick a favorite'; 'keep memorized it' is ungrammatical—use 'remember them' or 'remember it'; 'my country band' is unclear, likely 'my own country'; 'with any waves' is incorrect—use 'for new views' or 'scenes'. Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary placement ('I can't'), clearer pronouns ('them' for photos), and appropriate nouns ('own country', 'views').

× I really like to do looked at.

✓ I really like looking at them.

The verb phrase 'to do looked at' mixes infinitive, auxiliary, and past participle incorrectly. Use the gerund 'looking' after 'like' to express enjoyment of an activity. Also include the object pronoun 'them' to refer to the photos.