视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details, and avoid repetition. Correct verb forms (use present simple: 'I take' not 'I used to take') and add a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I usually use my smartphone and take pictures whenever I visit a new place, and I often share them with friends so they can see where I’ve been.

建議: Answer directly with a topic sentence, correct prepositions, and reduce hesitations. Use a linking word (because/so) and give a specific reason or brief example. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'prefer to go rural areas'—say 'prefer rural areas' or 'going to rural areas'.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I love the peaceful countryside atmosphere and the natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing fields and small villages, which are quieter than busy city streets.

建議: Start with a clear statement: 'I prefer views in my own country.' Correct grammar (use present simple and proper clauses), avoid filler words, and give a specific detail to support your preference (e.g., types of scenery).

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because I come from a small island surrounded by the Indian Ocean. The beaches, coastal cliffs and lush vegetation are very picturesque, so I often choose to photograph them rather than foreign landscapes.

× Of course I used to take pictures my smartphone camera.

✓ Of course I used to take pictures with my smartphone camera.

ID 5 & 11: Past tense / habitual past (used to) is fine to show a past habit, but the sentence misses the preposition 'with' after 'take pictures'. Add 'with' to indicate the instrument. Also include 'my' before 'smartphone' as given. Suggestion: 'I used to take pictures with my smartphone camera.'

× Whenever I visit different place I used to take pictures.

✓ Whenever I visited different places, I used to take pictures.

ID 1 & 5 & 11: 'different place' should be plural 'different places' when speaking generally. The time clause 'Whenever I visited' must match the past habitual 'used to'. Also add a comma after the clause. Suggestion: use consistent past habitual tense 'Whenever I visited different places, I used to take pictures.'

× I often take pictures and I share with them with my friends so they can know where I've been.

✓ I often take pictures and share them with my friends so they can know where I've been.

ID 12 & 11: The pronoun and preposition order is wrong: 'share with them with my friends' should be 'share them with my friends.' Remove the duplicate 'with' and place 'them' (the pictures) before 'with my friends.' Also keep present simple 'take' and 'share' for habitual actions.

× I would say I prefer to go rural areas because of I love that countryside feeling so much.

✓ I would say I prefer to go to rural areas because I love that countryside feeling so much.

ID 11 & 22: Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' when referring to places: 'go to rural areas.' Remove 'because of' and use 'because' before a clause ('because I love...') or use 'because of' + noun. Suggestion: 'I prefer to go to rural areas because I love that countryside feeling.'

× I feel urban areas quite busy so I'm enjoying day to visit and taking pictures in rural areas.

✓ I find urban areas quite busy, so I enjoy spending the day visiting and taking pictures in rural areas.

ID 6 & 26: 'I feel urban areas quite busy' is better as 'I find urban areas quite busy' (verb choice). 'I'm enjoying day to visit' is ungrammatical; use simple present for general preference: 'I enjoy spending the day visiting and taking pictures...' Use gerunds 'visiting' and 'taking' correctly and include 'spending the' for 'day.'

× Well, I believe my country, I coming from a small island and it's uh, surrounding by the ocean, Indian Ocean.

✓ Well, I believe my country does; I come from a small island and it's surrounded by the Indian Ocean.

ID 6 & 9 & 11: 'I coming from' is missing the auxiliary and wrong tense; use simple present 'I come from' for origin. 'Surrounding by the ocean' is wrong passive form; use past participle 'surrounded by' for passive. Also include the article 'the' before 'Indian Ocean.' The clause 'I believe my country does' or 'I believe it's' fixes sentence flow.

× So I feel my country has uh, plenty of beautiful sceneries, picturesque, so I prefer.

✓ So I feel my country has plenty of beautiful scenery; it's very picturesque, so I prefer it.

ID 13 & 22 & 1: 'sceneries' is usually uncountable as 'scenery.' 'Picturesque' is an adjective and needs a subject ('it's picturesque'). Finish with 'I prefer it' to clarify the object. Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: 'plenty of beautiful scenery' and 'it's very picturesque.'