视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve fluency and accuracy by removing fillers (uh, um), correcting word choices, and using a clear topic sentence followed by two supporting details. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words like “because” and “also” correctly, and replace vague words ("columns, comforting") with precise vocabulary (e.g., "relaxing, meaningful").

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax and capture meaningful memories. For example, I often save landscapes and cityscapes in my gallery and later share my favorite shots on Instagram. I try to take pictures when the light is good to make them more attractive.

建議: Work on grammar and pronunciation (e.g., "addicted to" → "very fond of"), remove repetitions and fillers, and present a clear topic sentence with specific supporting details. Use linking phrases such as "because" and "for example" to make your answer coherent. Provide concrete sensory details (sounds, smells, sights) to enrich content.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are calm and restorative. For example, I love hearing birdsong and leaves rustling in the forest, and the fresh air helps me relax. Because of this peaceful atmosphere, I often choose rural landscapes for my photos.

建議: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary (e.g., "mountains", "Kazakhstan"); avoid vague phrasing and ungrammatical sentences. Start with a direct answer (e.g., "I prefer views in my country") then give two specific examples and a linking word like "for example" or "if". Keep sentences concise and coherent.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, you can visit mountains in Almaty region and see modern architecture and bustling streets in the capital, Nur-Sultan. This variety means I can photograph both nature and urban development without traveling abroad.

× To be honest, I like taking pictures of different views because, uh, it's means for me like columns, comforting and also I feel myself very good.

✓ To be honest, I like taking pictures of different views because they are calming and comforting for me, and they make me feel very good.

Original uses 'it's means' and 'columns' incorrectly. 'Taking pictures' refers to 'pictures' (plural), so use a plural subject 'they' and adjectives 'calming' and 'comforting' which are present participles used as adjectives (verb in the present participle form). Also replace 'I feel myself very good' with 'they make me feel very good' for natural English and correct verb usage. Suggestions: use present participle adjectives correctly (calming, comforting), match subject number and use 'make someone feel' for expressing cause and effect.

× Uh, and I always keep, uh, keep in my gallery different, different pictures which I took, uh, I, I like share on my Instagram.

✓ I always keep different pictures I took in my gallery, and I like to share them on my Instagram.

Issues: repeated 'keep, keep', word order, and missing 'to' before 'share'. Use past participle 'took' is acceptable but better to use 'that I took' or reduce to 'I took'. 'Share' as an infinitive requires 'to' when following 'like' ('like to share') or use gerund 'like sharing'. Also add object 'them' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify order: 'I always keep the pictures I took in my gallery, and I like to share them on Instagram.'.

× To be honest, I addicted, I addicted with rural areas because, uh, it's calm, it's comfy for me.

✓ To be honest, I am attracted to rural areas because they are calm and comfortable for me.

'I addicted' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'addicted to' (for addiction) or better 'attracted to' for preference. Also 'it's calm, it's comfy' should match plural 'rural areas' so use 'they are calm and comfortable'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and uses proper adjective forms. Suggestion: use 'I am attracted to' or 'I prefer' and ensure pronoun agrees with plural noun.

× I feel myself very, uh, good when I'm in rural areas.

✓ I feel very good when I am in rural areas.

English does not use 'feel myself' to express personal feeling; use 'I feel' plus adjective. Also expand contraction 'I'm' to 'I am' optional. Suggestion: say 'I feel very good' or 'I feel relaxed'.

× I like, I like umm, sounds of forest mounds and uh, so.

✓ I like the sounds of the forest and so on.

'Forest mounds' is not a natural phrase; likely 'forest sounds' or 'the sounds of the forest'. Repetition 'I like, I like' and trailing 'and so' should be cleaned to 'and so on' or omitted. Suggestion: be specific: 'I like the sounds of the forest' or 'I like birdsong and the rustling of leaves'.

× My country is one of the very best country in the world because you can see everything.

✓ My country is one of the very best countries in the world because you can see many different landscapes.

'One of the very best country' mixes singular 'country' with 'one of', which requires plural 'countries'. Also 'you can see everything' is vague; better 'many different landscapes'. Suggestion: ensure noun after 'one of the' is plural.

× If you want to see months, you can go in Kazakh, in another place.

✓ If you want to see mountains, you can go to Kazakhstan or to other places.

'Months' is a misspelling of 'mountains'. Use preposition 'to' with destinations ('go to Kazakhstan'). 'Kazakh' is the adjective; the country name is 'Kazakhstan'. Suggestion: use correct nouns and prepositions: 'go to Kazakhstan'.

× If you want to look another cities more more, how can I say develop the development, you can go in capital city.

✓ If you want to see more developed cities, you can go to the capital city.

Original has awkward phrasing 'look another cities more more' and 'develop the development'. Use 'see more developed cities' or 'see more of the developed cities'. Use 'go to the capital city' with preposition 'to' and include the article 'the' before 'capital city'. Suggestion: simplify and use 'see', 'more developed', and correct prepositions/articles.