视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid filler phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief examples. Fix grammatical errors (e.g., 'a picture is worth more than 1,000 words') and remove 'you know' and similar fillers.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different scenes because they help me preserve memories and share experiences with friends. For example, I often photograph sunsets or city skylines and post them on social media to remember special trips.

建議: Give a direct answer (choose one or say 'both' with balance) and then provide clear, specific contrasts using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'suggest new things to watch' and repetitive words. Correct grammar and plurality ('rural areas').

範例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. Urban areas impress me with modern architecture and lively streets, while rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and traditional cultural scenes, so I enjoy both for different reasons.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details rather than vague adjectives. Use linking words to contrast preferences and correct awkward phrases ('beautiful to build' is incorrect). Mention a concrete example concisely.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and vibrant. For instance, our waterfalls are spectacular and abundant, so I often visit them for relaxation, although I would also like to see landscapes abroad someday.

× Also, there is a saying that a picture is worth more than 1000 word which helps to, you know, interpret.

✓ Also, there is a saying that a picture is worth more than 1000 words which helps to, you know, interpret.

The noun 'word' should be plural 'words' because the phrase '1000 words' refers to multiple words; the number requires a plural noun. Suggestion: use 'words' whenever referring to a count greater than one.

× I love snapping photos of different scenes and this is because I enjoy keeping memories and posting them on social media.

✓ I love snapping photos of different scenes, and this is because I enjoy preserving memories and posting them on social media.

The phrase 'keeping memories' is not the usual collocation; 'preserve' or 'keep' with 'memories' is acceptable but 'preserving memories' is more natural. This is a word choice/collocation issue related to prepositional/verb usage. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'preserving memories' or 'keeping memories alive.'

× they have new developments and also views in rural area are also nice because they support culture.

✓ they have new developments, and also views in rural areas are nice because they support culture.

The phrase 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match the earlier general reference to 'views in urban areas' and to indicate a general category. Also remove duplicate 'also'. Suggestion: keep number agreement consistent when comparing categories.

× I prefer both views because views in urban areas are sometimes beautiful, they bring new things, they suggest new things to watch, they have new developments and also views in rural area are also nice because they support culture.

✓ I prefer both kinds of views: urban views are sometimes beautiful and offer new things to see, such as developments, while rural views are pleasant because they support local culture.

The original sentence is a run-on with repeated 'they' clauses and awkward phrasing like 'suggest new things to watch.' This is a sentence structure and cohesion problem. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, use parallel structure and more natural verbs like 'offer' and 'see.'

× It is exciting, it is lively and it is beautiful.

✓ They are exciting, lively, and beautiful.

The student is referring to 'views,' which is plural, so adjectives should describe a plural subject. Original uses singular 'it' repeatedly, causing mismatch. Suggestion: use plural pronoun 'they' and combine adjectives with correct punctuation.

× Also, I would love to try views from other countries, but for my country, for example, we have different waterfalls which are very beautiful to build and amazing.

✓ Also, I would love to see views from other countries, but for my country, for example, we have different waterfalls which are very beautiful and amazing.

The verb 'try views' is incorrect collocation; use 'see' or 'experience.' The phrase 'beautiful to build' is ungrammatical here; likely the student intended 'very beautiful' or 'easy to build' but context suggests 'very beautiful.' Suggestion: use 'see' and remove 'to build.'