视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant and shows enthusiasm, but it is a little repetitive and contains hesitations. To improve, make your response more concise (maximum 3–4 sentences), avoid filler words like “uh,” and add one specific example or reason using a linking word to make it coherent. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “capture” instead of “take”) to sound more natural.

範例: Yes, I enjoy capturing different views, especially natural scenes such as sunsets and mountains. For example, I often photograph the sunset at a nearby hill because the changing colours create memorable images. Therefore, photos help me preserve moments I can’t otherwise relive.

建議: The answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors, unclear phrases, and repetition. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific reasons, and using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Correct grammar (e.g., 'in my opinion' and remove unclear fragments like 'UMM'). Keep it concise and natural.

範例: I prefer urban views because city sunsets often look striking against skyscrapers and bridges. For example, the way sunlight reflects on glass buildings creates dramatic colours, so I find urban sunsets more visually interesting than rural ones.

建議: Your response is relevant and mentions specific places, which is good, but it contains hesitations and slightly awkward phrasing. Improve by forming a clear contrast using linking words (e.g., 'although', 'however') and by removing filler words. Make the sentence structure smoother and provide a brief reason for wanting to visit the foreign site.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country, especially the sunrises and sunsets at Karachi Beach, because they feel familiar and peaceful. However, I would love to visit Niagara Falls in Canada to see the powerful waterfalls in person, as photos and videos don’t capture the scale and sound of the place.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially of nature like sunset, mountains and other views.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially of natural scenes like sunsets, mountains, and other landscapes.

Use 'natural scenes' instead of 'nature like' for natural phrasing; 'sunset' should be plural 'sunsets' when speaking generally; add commas and 'and' for a correct list. The original error is not a verb+ing mistake in form but improper noun phrase and list punctuation; corrected to sound natural and grammatical.

× I think the pictures give us the memories that we hold.

✓ I think the pictures give us memories that we hold.

Article 'the' before 'memories' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the plural noun phrase grammatically natural. This is a singular/plural/article usage issue.

× We can't stop time, but we can hold it in our memories and that's why I like taking pictures of different views. Uh.

✓ We can't stop time, but we can preserve it in our memories, and that's why I like taking pictures of different views.

The phrase 'hold it in our memories' is awkward; 'preserve it in our memories' is clearer. Also combine clauses properly and remove filler 'Uh' for fluency. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× I prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas because I in my opinion the sunset in urban areas looks more beautiful than at the rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas rather than rural areas because, in my opinion, the sunsets in urban areas look more beautiful than those in rural areas.

Original sentence has misplaced 'in my opinion' and awkward comparative phrasing. Move 'in my opinion' to a parenthetical position, pluralize 'sunset' to 'sunsets' for general statement, and use 'those in rural areas' to avoid repetition. This addresses sentence structure and comparison clarity.

× As I am the biggest UMM fan of the sunset, I am really want to so that's why.

✓ As I am a big fan of sunsets, I really want to see them, so that's why.

The original contains ungrammatical fragments: 'biggest UMM fan' is unclear and 'I am really want to so' mixes verb forms. Change to 'a big fan of sunsets' and use correct verb form 'I really want to see them.' This corrects sentence structure and verb usage.

× I love views in my country as sunset and sunrise in uh, at Karachi beach uh, but I like to visit Niagara Falls located in Canada.

✓ I love the views in my country, such as the sunsets and sunrises at Karachi beach, but I would like to visit Niagara Falls in Canada.

Use definite article 'the views' and pluralize 'sunset and sunrise' to 'sunsets and sunrises' for general reference. Remove redundant preposition 'located' and use 'would like to visit' to express desire more naturally. This fixes present tense phrasing and article use.

× I want to umm experience the view uh, with my own eyes rather than in movies and videos.

✓ I want to experience the view with my own eyes rather than through movies and videos.

Remove fillers 'umm' and 'uh'. Use 'experience' correctly (verb + object) and prefer 'through movies and videos' rather than 'in'. This improves verb phrase clarity and preposition choice.