视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Remove repetition and use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") correctly. Also use plural/singular forms properly (e.g., "views" and "creates").

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph city skylines and beaches so I can look back at trips and share them with family.

建議: Give a direct clear answer first, then support it with specific reasons and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words (however, because, although) accurately and check for logical consistency (you said urban but then implied limited views).

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and architecture of cities. For example, I like photographing modern skyscrapers and busy streets, while rural views are calmer but less varied visually.

建議: Make your position clear (prefer my country vs other countries) and avoid unclear phrases like "losing my own country". Support your view with one specific reason and a brief example, and correct grammar errors ("economical" → "economy").

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many attractive tourist spots. For example, our scenic coastline and historic towns draw visitors and help boost the local economy through tourism.

× I I like to take a picture of different view but because it create memories and history in our phones or in albums in other and taking pictures is my one of the hobbies.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views because they create memories and preserve moments on our phones or in albums, and taking pictures is one of my hobbies.

The sentence has several singular/plural mismatches: 'a picture of different view' should be 'pictures of different views' (plural for general cases), and 'it create' should be 'they create' to agree with the plural subject 'pictures'. Also 'my one of the hobbies' is incorrect order; 'one of my hobbies' is correct. Improve by ensuring nouns and pronouns agree in number and by using natural word order.

× And so yeah, I I used to like taking pictures of different views so it can carry memories with me.

✓ And so yeah, I used to like taking pictures of different views because they can carry memories for me.

'So it can carry' uses 'it' and 'carry' incorrectly: 'taking pictures' or 'pictures' is plural, so use 'they can carry'. Also 'with me' is better phrased as 'for me' in this context. Ensure pronoun number matches noun and choose appropriate preposition.

× I prefer views in urban areas cause in urban areas there are many buildings so so we can't see much view compared to rural area.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many buildings, so we can't see as much of the view compared to rural areas.

'Cause' is informal; use 'because' in formal answers. Repeated 'so so' is an error. 'Much view' is unnatural — use 'as much of the view' or 'as many views', and 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general comparison. Improve by using correct conjunctions and natural comparative phrasing.

× So I think I like more views in urban areas.

✓ So I think I like views in urban areas more.

Word order and emphasis: 'I like more views in urban areas' could imply quantity; the natural placement is 'I like views in urban areas more.' This preserves meaning and corrects awkward phrasing.

× I prefer losing my own country because my country itself is a tourism country.

✓ I prefer living in my own country because my country is a tourist destination.

'Losing' is the wrong verb; likely intended 'living in'. Also 'a tourism country' is incorrect collocation; use 'a tourist destination' or 'a country with tourism'. Correct verb and noun phrase choices and use proper preposition 'living in'.

× So the better view, the better tourists get attracted towards my country.

✓ Better views attract more tourists to my country.

'The better view, the better tourists get attracted towards my country' is awkward and uses passive/wordy structure. Use active voice: subject 'better views' and verb 'attract'. Also 'get attracted towards' is nonnative; use 'attract to' or 'attract' directly.

× So yeah, better view in my country is more beneficial for our country. Economic in economical state.

✓ So yes, better views in my country are more beneficial for our economy.

The original has fragmented and awkward structure. 'Better view in my country is more beneficial for our country' has number and repetition problems; use plural 'views' and concise 'beneficial for our economy.' 'Economic in economical state' is ungrammatical; replace with 'for our economy.' Improve by combining ideas into a single clear sentence.