视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and conditional phrasing like "if I'll be"; use correct tense and reduce redundancy. Add one brief supporting reason or example with a linking word.

範例: I don't consider myself a photographer, but I do take photos when the scenery is impressive. For example, when I visited the coast last year, I took several shots of the sunset because the colours were amazing.

建議: Begin with a direct statement and refine vocabulary and grammar (use 'greenery' singular and avoid 'do' for simple likes). Add one contrasting detail using a linking word to show balance.

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy mountain landscapes and the evening greenery. However, I also appreciate city views at night because the lights can look very striking.

建議: Be specific and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Start with a clear preference, give a reason, and provide a brief example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'scenery' not 'sceneries').

範例: I enjoy views in my own country because our beaches are spectacular, and I often visit the coast for relaxation. At the same time, I like the scenery in European countries, for instance the alpine landscapes in Switzerland, because they are very picturesque.

× I am not into photography and I'm also not into sightseeing, but certainly if I'll be in a place that has a very good scenery, I'll be glad to take some photos.

✓ I am not into photography and I'm also not into sightseeing, but certainly if I am in a place that has very good scenery, I'll be glad to take some photos.

Use of 'if I'll be' is incorrect because in conditional clauses referring to future time English uses the present simple (not 'will') in the if-clause. Replace 'if I'll be' with 'if I am'. Also 'a very good scenery' is incorrect article/use; 'scenery' is uncountable so use 'very good scenery' without 'a'. Suggestion: use present simple in the if-clause for future conditions and treat 'scenery' as uncountable.

× I prefer rural areas because I do enjoy mountains and the greeneries in the evening, though I think the city lights would also be attractive.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I do enjoy mountains and the greenery in the evening, though I think the city lights are also attractive.

'Greeneries' is incorrect because 'greenery' is an uncountable noun, not normally pluralized; use 'the greenery'. Also 'would also be attractive' is acceptable but 'are also attractive' better matches the general preference context and present simple. Suggestion: use uncountable form 'greenery' and prefer present simple 'are' for general statements.

× Our country is better known for our beaches and yes, I enjoy those views and I also appreciate the views of other countries, especially those around Europe.

✓ My country is better known for its beaches and yes, I enjoy those views and I also appreciate the views of other countries, especially those in Europe.

Using 'Our country' and then 'our beaches' is awkward for an individual speaker; 'my country' is more natural. Also use the possessive pronoun 'its' for the country: 'its beaches'. 'Around Europe' is less precise than 'in Europe' when referring to countries within Europe. Suggestion: use 'my country' and 'its' for single-speaker perspective and use 'in Europe' for location.