视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Shorten and correct grammar, use one clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect plural/possessive forms (e.g., “every photo” not “every photos”), and simplify phrases like “for the rest of the lives” to “for a long time” or “forever.”

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because each scene tells a unique story. For example, when I photograph a sunrise at the beach, I try to capture the changing colours and a lone silhouette to convey calmness and solitude.

建議: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons using linking words (for example, because, moreover). Avoid vague phrases like “rawness inside” and correct errors such as subject-verb agreement and redundant words (“can cannot”).

範例: I prefer rural views because they often show natural landscapes and traditional lifestyles. For example, I like photographing farmers working in terraced fields and old village houses, which give a stronger sense of place than city streets.

建議: Be precise and avoid exaggeration or awkward phrasing. Start with a direct answer, then give specific examples and a short reason. Avoid confusing statements (the Taj Mahal is a monument, not natural heritage) and refine vocabulary (e.g., “cultural and natural heritage”).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers both cultural and natural attractions. For instance, landmarks like the Taj Mahal and nearby historic sites give rich photo opportunities that reflect our history and traditions.

× Of course, I would love to take pictures of different views because every photos or views have a sense of story that is to be told to the world.

✓ Of course, I would love to take pictures of different views because every photo or view has a sense of story to be told to the world.

The sentence mixes singular and plural forms with incorrect determiners and wording. 'Every' requires a singular noun, so use 'photo' or 'view' (not 'photos or views'). Also 'that is to be told to the world' is wordy; 'to be told to the world' or simply 'to tell the world' is more natural. Suggestion: choose consistent number (singular) after 'every' and simplify the clause.

× So it's very important to capture the right view at the right time so that we could remember it for the rest of the lives.

✓ So it's very important to capture the right view at the right time so that we can remember it for the rest of our lives.

The modal 'could' is acceptable but 'can' is more appropriate for general ability in present context. 'the lives' is incorrect; use 'our lives' to indicate whose lives are meant. Also maintain subject-verb agreement and natural pronoun choice. Suggestion: use 'can' for present ability and 'our lives' for possession.

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas has that rawness inside and it can cannot be seen in the urban areas.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have that rawness, and it cannot be seen in urban areas.

Subject-verb agreement: 'rural areas' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have', not 'has'. Also 'can cannot' is a duplication error; choose 'cannot' or 'cannot be seen'. Drop the article 'the' before 'urban areas' unless referring to specific urban areas. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and avoid duplicated modals.

× And also rural areas have different culture, different people that we see from our daily life basis.

✓ And rural areas also have different cultures and different people that we see in our daily lives.

'Culture' should be plural 'cultures' when speaking generally about different cultures. 'And also' is redundant; 'And' or 'Also' is sufficient. 'From our daily life basis' is unidiomatic; use 'in our daily lives'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for generalization and common expressions like 'in our daily lives.'

× Definitely, I prefer views in my own country because my country is basically built on natural heritage and it is something that is to be explored by all people living in the world.

✓ Definitely, I prefer views in my own country because my country is basically built on natural heritage and it is something for people around the world to explore.

Phrase 'something that is to be explored by all people living in the world' is awkward and overly passive. Use a more natural present-tense construction: 'something for people around the world to explore.' This keeps present-tense preference and clearer meaning. Suggestion: prefer active, concise phrasing in present context.

× And we could say that, for instance, let's take examples of Taj Mahal and one among the seven wonders, and there are also many other.

✓ For instance, we could take the example of the Taj Mahal, which is one of the seven wonders; there are many others as well.

Original sentence mixes clauses awkwardly and uses incorrect article use and phrasing: 'let's take examples of Taj Mahal and one among the seven wonders' is ungrammatical. Use 'the Taj Mahal' (definite article) and the idiom 'one of the seven wonders.' End with 'there are many others as well' for clarity. Suggestion: reorganize sentence for clear subject-verb structure and correct articles.