视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use correct tense and word forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (helped → helps/help, photographic → photographer/photography), and add one specific detail about what you enjoy photographing. Use one linking phrase for clarity.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me improve my photography skills. For example, last week I visited a waterfront park and practiced capturing sunrise reflections on the water, which taught me more about lighting and composition.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar and vocabulary. Use a clear topic sentence stating preference, explain reasons with specific details, and avoid repetitive language and fillers. Fix tense errors (have take → took) and use more precise phrases (natural → natural scenery).

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer forests and mountains that inspire me. For example, last weekend I took many photos of a mountain trail, focusing on different perspectives of the trees and mist to practice depth and framing.

建議: Make the comparison clearer and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence (I like both), then give balanced reasons using linking words (because, while). Use specific contrasts (modern architecture vs natural landscapes) and avoid vague phrases like 'a modern thing' and 'naturals'.

範例: I like both views: in my country I enjoy modern architecture and cityscapes, while in other countries I appreciate natural landscapes like mountains and forests. For example, I photograph contemporary buildings at home, but when I travel I focus on dramatic mountain panoramas.

× Actually, yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it helped me to improve my photographic skills and to be more professional photographic.

✓ Actually, yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it has helped me to improve my photographic skills and to become more professional in photography.

The student mixed present tense 'I like' with simple past 'helped'. Use present perfect 'has helped' to show a past action with present relevance. 'To be more professional photographic' is ungrammatical: use 'to become more professional in photography' or 'to become a more professional photographer'. Suggestion: use 'has helped' for experiences that affect the present and rephrase the noun/adjective combination correctly.

× For example, uh, last week I visited different place which provides for me a great view.

✓ For example, last week I visited a different place which provided me with a great view.

'Different place' needs an article: 'a different place' (singular). 'Provides for me' is awkward; use 'provided me with' and keep tense consistent with past 'visited' so use 'provided'. Suggestion: include the correct article for singular nouns and match verb tense to the time expression 'last week'.

× Actually, I definitely prefer views in rural areas because there are several trees and mountains there, which is more useful for me.

✓ Actually, I definitely prefer views in rural areas because there are many trees and mountains there, which are more useful to me.

'Several' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural. The relative clause 'which is more useful for me' mismatches plurality: 'trees and mountains' are plural, so use 'are'. Use 'to me' rather than 'for me' in this context. Ensure subject-verb number agreement. Suggestion: make relative clause agree with plural antecedent and use natural collocations like 'useful to me'.

× For example, last week I have take uh, more uh photos for the natural there.

✓ For example, last week I took more photos of the natural scenery there.

The phrase 'I have take' is incorrect: use simple past 'I took' with 'last week'. 'Photos for the natural' is incorrect preposition and noun choice: use 'photos of the natural scenery' or 'nature photos'. Suggestion: use simple past with specific past time expressions and correct prepositions ('photos of').

× To be honest I prefer both of them because in my country it has a modern design, A modern thing, but in other countries which have naturals and mountains that not available in my country so both of them.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both because my country has modern architecture and design, but other countries have natural landscapes and mountains that are not available in my country, so I like both.

Problems: unnecessary pronoun 'them' after 'both' can be omitted but acceptable; 'in my country it has a modern design' incorrectly uses 'it' and 'has'—use 'my country has'. 'A modern thing' is vague and ungrammatical. 'Which have naturals and mountains that not available' has pronoun and verb errors: use 'have natural landscapes and mountains that are not available'. Also add commas and conjunctions for clarity. Suggestion: refer to 'my country' as the subject, use plural/specific nouns ('landscapes'), include the auxiliary 'are' in negative clause, and simplify sentences for clarity.