视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, avoid repetition, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I've been interested" not "I've had interesting", and "it makes me take" not "it makes me to take"). Aim for 3–4 sentences total.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because photography improves my mood and helps me notice small details. For example, when I photograph a park I focus on light and color, which makes me feel more relaxed. Overall, it’s a hobby I’ve been interested in since childhood and still enjoy.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Fix grammatical issues (say "prefer rural areas to urban areas" and avoid unfinished sentences). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include one clear example or brief explanation of a memory.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they feel more natural and less crowded. For instance, photographing a quiet field lets me capture authentic light and scenery, which reminds me of the countryside where I played as a child. This connection to nature and memory is why I usually choose rural locations.

建議: Start with a clear statement and combine reasons with linking words. Correct grammar ("in other countries" plural, and avoid sentence fragments). Provide one complete example that explains what you learned. Keep answer to 3–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because travel lets me explore new cultures and learn the history behind landmarks. For example, photographing the Statue of Liberty taught me about American immigration history and why the monument is symbolic. Those discoveries make my photos more meaningful and satisfying.

× Photography is a hobby that I've had interesting since I was a kid.

✓ Photography is a hobby that I've found interesting since I was a kid.

The student used 'interesting' incorrectly after 'had'. The verb 'find' is commonly used to describe something's perceived quality (I find it interesting). Using 'had interesting' is ungrammatical. Correct by using 'found interesting' or rephrase to 'has interested me since I was a kid'. Suggestion: use 'find/found' with adjectives to express perception.

× They help me to connect to my childhood memories, to help me to feel the memories I had when I was a child and.

✓ They help me connect with my childhood memories and make me feel the emotions I had when I was a child.

Sentence has extra 'to' infinitives and a trailing 'and' causing structure problems. 'Connect with' is the more natural collocation than 'connect to'. Also avoid repeating 'to help me' and use parallel verbs: 'help me connect' and 'make me feel'. Remove the final 'and'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and correct preposition 'with' for 'connect'.

× I prefer views in other countries because views in other country helps me to explore and I like being adventurous and views in other country also make me learn.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because views in other countries help me explore; I like being adventurous, and views in other countries also help me learn.

Mismatch between plural 'countries' and singular 'country'. Use consistent plural form. Also 'help me to explore' is fine but 'help me explore' is more natural. Verb agreement: with plural 'views' use 'help' (not 'helps'). Suggestion: ensure nouns and verbs agree in number and repeat 'in other countries' or restructure to avoid repetition.

× Make me learn the history that goes behind the views I'm taking.

✓ They make me learn about the history behind the views I take.

Original fragment 'Make me learn...' lacks a clear subject and is awkward. Adding subject 'They' (referring to views) and using 'learn about' is natural. Also use present simple 'I take' to match habitual action. Suggestion: include explicit subject and use 'learn about' + noun phrase.

× It makes me to take pictures of different views and appreciate those views and also appreciate nature and all the things that nature has to offer.

✓ It makes me take pictures of different views and appreciate those views and also appreciate nature and all that nature has to offer.

The verb 'make' followed by a verb should not include 'to' in causative construction: use 'make me take', not 'make me to take'. Also 'all the things that nature has to offer' is wordy; 'all that nature has to offer' is more natural. Suggestion: remove 'to' after 'makes me' and simplify the phrase.