视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition; use correct verb forms (e.g., "I like taking pictures").

範例: I love taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel outside my city I photograph landscapes, and at home I take photos of new dresses or jewelry to remember how they look. These photos act as memories that I can look back on later.

建議: Give a direct answer first and then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "I love taking pictures," "I prefer natural landscapes because...").

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I enjoy natural scenery. For instance, I like photographing green landscapes, rivers and forests since they look more peaceful and colourful in photos.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, then give a concise explanation with one or two specific details. Fix grammar and sentence flow (e.g., "I haven't had the chance to travel abroad"). Avoid hesitation and repeat words.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't had the chance to travel abroad. However, if I could visit other countries, I would take many photos there too, since foreign landscapes would create special memories to share when I return home.

× Well, I am travel freak person and I like to taking picture whenever I go outside from my city and my house.

✓ Well, I am a travel-freak person and I like to take pictures whenever I go outside my city or my house.

Errors: missing article before 'travel-freak person', incorrect hyphenation/collocation, wrong verb form 'to taking', noun plural 'picture'. Reason: 'a' is required before a singular countable noun; 'travel-freak' is better hyphenated as a compound adjective; after 'like' use base verb 'take' not 'to taking'; when referring to multiple photos use plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: Use 'a' for singular countable nouns, use base form after 'like', and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× I also like to making picture when I, when I try my new dress, jewelry and so on.

✓ I also like to take pictures when I try on a new dress or wear jewelry and so on.

Errors: 'to making' mixes infinitive 'to' with -ing form; 'picture' should be plural; missing preposition 'try on' for clothes; 'wear' fits jewelry. Reason: After 'like' you can use 'to' + base verb or base verb alone; don't combine 'to' with verb+ing. Also use correct verbs for actions with clothes (try on) and pluralize 'pictures'. Suggestion: Use 'like to take' or 'like taking', use 'try on' for clothes, pluralize countable nouns.

× Because, uh, I pictures are memories for us and we can, uh, see at.

✓ Because photos are memories for us and we can look at them.

Errors: unnecessary pronoun 'I' before 'pictures', incorrect noun form 'pictures' usage, wrong verb 'see at' instead of 'look at', awkward sentence start with 'Because' followed by fragment. Reason: 'Because' can start a clause but must be followed by a complete clause; 'photos' is natural word; 'look at' is the correct phrasal verb. Suggestion: Remove stray pronoun, use 'photos' or 'pictures', and use 'look at them' to refer back to photos.

× As I earlier mentioned, I love take pictures, so no, it doesn't matter for me urban area or rural area.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I love taking pictures, so it doesn't matter to me whether it is an urban area or a rural area.

Errors: adverb order 'earlier mentioned' should be 'mentioned earlier'; 'love take' should be 'love taking' or 'love to take'; missing 'to' after 'matter' ('matter to me'); missing 'whether' to introduce alternatives and missing articles 'an'/'a'. Reason: Adverb placement matters for natural English; use gerund after 'love' is common; 'matter to me' is fixed phrase; use 'whether' for two options and include articles. Suggestion: Use natural adverb order, use gerund after 'love', and include 'to me' and articles.

× But I like this any scenery, view, landscapes and so awesome natural places where greenery and because I love of nature where I prefer to take pictures.

✓ But I like any scenery, views, landscapes and beautiful natural places with lots of greenery because I love nature and prefer to take pictures there.

Errors: redundant words 'this any', incorrect noun forms 'view' vs 'views', awkward 'so awesome natural places where greenery', wrong preposition 'of' after 'love', misplaced 'where'. Reason: Use 'any' without 'this', pluralize when listing multiple items, use adjectives like 'beautiful', use 'with' to describe greenery, 'love nature' not 'love of nature' in this context, and place 'there' to indicate location. Suggestion: Simplify lists, use correct adjective order, and correct prepositions and noun forms.

× Actually I'm from India and I do not get any chance to, uh, travel other countries.

✓ Actually I'm from India and I have not had the chance to travel to other countries.

Errors: tense and aspect 'do not get any chance' unnatural; missing 'to' before 'other countries' and article use with 'chance'; better idiom is 'have not had the chance'. Reason: English uses present perfect 'have not had' to talk about life experience up to now; 'travel to other countries' requires 'to'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences and include 'to' with 'travel'.

× So I prefer my countries if I but if I get chance to travel the other countries, I I accept it and it takes a lot of the picture because when I back to my country, it makes the memory for me as well as.

✓ So I prefer my country, but if I get the chance to travel to other countries, I will accept it and take a lot of pictures because when I return to my country, they will be memories for me.

Errors: 'prefer my countries' should be 'prefer my country'; missing articles 'the chance'; incorrect future expression 'I I accept it' and tense usage — use 'will' for future; 'it takes a lot of the picture' incorrect verb and article; 'when I back' needs verb 'return'; pronoun reference 'it' should be 'they' for pictures. Reason: Subject-verb agreement and correct noun number, proper future tense use with 'will', correct verbs ('take' not 'takes') and plural pronoun for pictures. Suggestion: Use singular 'country' when referring to own nation, include articles, use 'will' for future intentions, use 'take pictures', and 'return' for coming back.