视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid phrases like “In my opinion” when unnecessary, correct grammar (use future/past appropriately), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Limit to up to 3–4 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they capture special moments I can look back on. For example, when I visit a new city I photograph its skyline to remember how it felt. These pictures help me recall details like light and atmosphere later.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar (use singular/plural and article use). Reduce filler words (uh). Provide one clear reason and a brief example using a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and technological attractions. For example, I would like to live in Dubai, which has impressive skyscrapers and advanced public transport.

建議: Be decisive and clear: avoid repeating and fillers. Use correct phrasing (e.g., “it depends” then give a clear preference). Give a specific reason and a short example. Use linking words like “however” or “because.”

範例: It depends, but I usually prefer views in other countries because they offer different traditions and landscapes. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph unique festivals and traditional architecture that I don’t see at home.

× In my opinion, I would like to take pictures of different views because it will be a moment and I will remember it on future.

✓ In my opinion, I would like to take pictures of different views because they will be moments that I will remember in the future.

The original sentence misuses 'it' with 'pictures' (plural) and uses 'on future' incorrectly. Change 'it' to 'they' to match plural 'pictures' (subject-verb agreement) and use 'in the future' as the correct prepositional phrase. Also pluralize 'moment' to 'moments' to match 'pictures.' This keeps future tense ('will remember') consistent.

× In my opinion, I would prefer an urban areas because we are living now in a generation that is full of technology.

✓ In my opinion, I would prefer urban areas because we are living now in a generation that is full of technology.

The phrase 'an urban areas' mixes singular article 'an' with plural 'areas.' Remove the article to match plural 'urban areas.' Alternatively, use 'an urban area' if you mean one area. Also the rest of the sentence is grammatically acceptable.

× In my opinion, I would prefer an urban areas because we are living now in a generation that is full of technology.

✓ In my opinion, I would prefer urban areas because we are living now in a generation that is full of technology.

The clause 'we are living now in a generation' is awkward but grammatically present continuous; a clearer phrasing is 'we live in a generation that is full of technology.' Using simple present 'we live' is more natural for general truths. Suggestion: '...because we live in a generation that is full of technology.'

× For example, I would, uh, live in Dubai because it has many, uh, urban areas.

✓ For example, I would like to live in Dubai because it has many urban areas.

The original uses filler 'uh' and says 'I would live' without 'like,' making intent unclear. Add 'like to' to express preference: 'I would like to live in Dubai.' Remove fillers and the extra comma. 'Many urban areas' is fine.

× In my opinion, really it depends, uh, viewing in my country, my country or other countries.

✓ In my opinion, it really depends on whether I am viewing my own country or other countries.

The original is fragmented and contains filler 'uh' and repeated 'my country.' Rephrase to a clear conditional structure: 'it depends on whether...' Also use 'my own country' for clarity and include the preposition 'on.'

× In my opinion, really it depends, uh, viewing in my country, my country or other countries.

✓ In my opinion, it really depends on whether I am viewing my own country or other countries.

The gerund 'viewing' is incorrectly used here. Use the clause 'whether I am viewing' or 'whether I view' to form a proper conditional. This aligns verb form with the intended meaning.

× But I would prefer to via take a view to other countries because they have, uh, different, uh, traditions from my country.

✓ But I would prefer to travel to other countries because they have different traditions from my country.

The phrase 'to via take a view to other countries' incorrectly uses 'via' and 'take a view.' Use 'travel to other countries' or 'visit other countries.' Also remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. Preposition 'from' is fine in 'traditions from my country.'

× But I would prefer to via take a view to other countries because they have, uh, different, uh, traditions from my country.

✓ But I would prefer to travel to other countries because they have different traditions from my country.

'Take a view' is an incorrect verb phrase; the intended meaning is better expressed with verbs like 'travel' or 'visit.' The present participle forms and extra words ('via') should be removed for clarity.