视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify ideas and use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct words and linking phrases. Avoid invented or incorrect phrases (e.g. “training my uncle of you”, “land cap”, “low ankle”, “white socks”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I often photograph landscapes and skies because they show changing moods and light. For example, I sometimes shoot from a low angle to make a scene look more dramatic, and I use clouds or sunlight to create a romantic atmosphere.

建議: Be concise and grammatical: give a direct topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and one concrete example. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and correct tense and plurality (trees, weekends).

範例: I prefer rural views because I am introverted and enjoy quiet places with many trees and open space. For example, I often go to a nearby mountain café on weekend mornings to relax and take photos of the scenery.

建議: Make a clear choice and explain reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid confusing fragments; use linking words to compare (however, although, while). Give one specific reason for each side if you mention both.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because local scenery feels familiar and comfortable. However, I also enjoy views abroad occasionally because they are exciting and show different cultures and landscapes.

× I love taking photos when I go outdoor because training my uncle of you for lets me capture very different land cap and moods.

✓ I love taking photos when I go outdoors because training with my uncle allows me to capture very different landscapes and moods.

Errors: 'go outdoor' uses incorrect form; should be adverb 'outdoors' (type 10). 'training my uncle of you for' is ungrammatical and likely meant 'training with my uncle' or 'going out with my uncle' (type 26 sentence structure error was present but correction limited to list: treated as present participle/phrasing). 'lets me' should be 'allows me' for clarity and correctness (modal/verb choice). 'land cap' is misspelling and singular/plural mismatch; corrected to plural 'landscapes' (type 1). Suggestion: use adverbial form 'outdoors', use clear prepositional phrases like 'with my uncle', and choose verbs that convey meaning ('allows' or 'lets').

× For example starting from low ankle can make a screen look more romantic whilst a white socks stole the whole scenery.

✓ For example, shooting from a low angle can make a scene look more romantic, while a white sock can steal the whole scenery.

Errors: 'starting from low ankle' is incorrect word choice and form; replace with noun phrase 'shooting from a low angle' (type 13). 'screen' should be 'scene' (wrong word). 'whilst a white socks' has subject-verb/number mismatch and article error: 'a white socks' mixes singular article with plural noun; corrected to 'a white sock' (types 1 and 22). 'stole' past tense doesn't match general statement; use present 'can steal' or 'steals' (type 6 present tense issue). Suggestion: choose accurate photography terms ('low angle', 'shooting'), ensure noun/verb agreement and consistent tense.

× I refer views in rural areas because I'm an introvert and in and I enjoy quiet place with lots of tree and open space.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I'm an introvert and I enjoy quiet places with lots of trees and open space.

Errors: 'refer views' should be 'prefer views' (word choice but treated as pronoun/verb misuse leading to meaning error; primary correction uses correct verb). 'in and I' is redundant and ungrammatical (type 26 also present). 'quiet place' should be plural 'quiet places' to match general preference (type 1 singular/plural). 'lots of tree' should be 'lots of trees' (type 1). Suggestion: use 'prefer' to state preference, remove extra words, match plural nouns when speaking generally.

× For example, I often visit picturesque Land Cafe.

✓ For example, I often visit the picturesque Land Cafe.

Error: missing definite article 'the' before a specific place name when referring to a particular cafe (type 17 Article errors). Suggestion: use 'the' for a specific, named venue: 'the picturesque Land Cafe.'

× I often visit the mountain on the week on the weekend morning to relax and enjoy.

✓ I often visit the mountains on weekend mornings to relax and enjoy myself.

Errors: 'the mountain' may be plural if habitual visits to mountainous areas ('the mountains') or 'a mountain' if singular; plural better fits general habit (type 1). 'on the week' is incorrect; use 'on the weekend' or 'on weekends' and combine with 'mornings' for habitual action (type 11). 'on the weekend morning' is awkward; corrected to 'on weekend mornings'. Also added reflexive 'myself' to complete meaning. Suggestion: use plural nouns for habitual actions and correct prepositional phrases: 'on weekend mornings'.

× Actually, I'd like you in more of my own country and more local sceneries.

✓ Actually, I'd like to stay more in my own country and enjoy more local scenery.

Errors: 'I'd like you in more of my own country' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'I'd like to stay more in my own country' (type 4 modal/phrase misuse). 'more local sceneries' is awkward; 'local scenery' is uncountable and should be singular or 'local scenes' (type 14 quantifier/article). Suggestion: use 'I'd like to stay' to express preference about location and use 'local scenery' or 'local scenes' appropriately.

× Feel familiar and low starters and no starters.

✓ They feel familiar and less intimidating than new places.

Errors: original fragment 'Feel familiar and low starters and no starters' is ungrammatical and unclear (type 26). Interpreted intent: local places feel familiar and less intimidating; corrected accordingly. Suggestion: avoid fragments, use complete sentences that clearly state contrasts.

× Why few in other country are exciting and fresh? Because they show different culture and landscape.

✓ I find places in other countries exciting and fresh because they show different cultures and landscapes.

Errors: 'Why few in other country are exciting and fresh?' is incorrect question form and wrong determiners (type 26). 'few' should be 'places' or 'some places'; 'other country' needs plural 'countries' or 'another country'. Second sentence is a fragment starting with 'Because'—combine into one statement. Also 'culture and landscape' should be plural 'cultures and landscapes' when speaking generally (type 1). Suggestion: make a full sentence expressing preference and use plural nouns for generalization.