视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và độ mạch lạc: tránh tiếng ồm ồm (uh, umm) và lặp từ (“by by”). Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại cảnh bạn thích hoặc cách bạn chia sẻ ảnh). Sử dụng liên từ ngắn để kết nối ý (for example, so, because). Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel. For example, I like capturing coastal sunsets and historic streets because they remind me of the trip. I usually edit a few shots and share them with friends on social media.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, từ vựng và tính cụ thể: chú ý thời thì (use present tense 'prefer'), sửa cụm từ không đúng ('rustic charm' thay vì 'rustic jam') và hoàn thành cấu trúc mô tả (ví dụ: 'sense of tranquility and peace'). Bổ sung lý do cụ thể hoặc ví dụ để câu thuyết phục hơn, dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

範例: I prefer rural views because they often have a rustic charm and peaceful atmosphere. For instance, small villages with green fields and quiet lanes help me relax and think more clearly.

建議: Cải thiện tính rõ ràng và chính xác về ngữ pháp: thay 'sceneries' bằng 'scenery', tránh cụm từ mơ hồ ('I have a spell of feeling'); thay bằng diễn đạt rõ ràng về cảm xúc và kỷ niệm. Tránh câu ngắn mơ hồ ('With other countries I contemplate') — nếu muốn nói so sánh, nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao thích cảnh trong nước hơn nước ngoài. Dùng 2–3 câu rõ ràng, có liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'although'.

範例: I prefer the scenery in my own country because it reminds me of my childhood and family traditions. Although I enjoy landscapes abroad, local places feel more familiar and meaningful to me.

× I am keen on taking pictures of different views when traveling to new uh place.

✓ I am keen on taking pictures of different views when traveling to new places.

Use plural 'places' because 'traveling to new place' is uncountable here; 'new places' correctly matches 'different views' and the context of visiting multiple locations. Also 'keen on' requires verb+ing which is correct. Suggestion: use plural nouns after 'new' when referring generally to multiple locations.

× It can help me umm, keep memory by by uh, see pictures and share it with my friends.

✓ It can help me keep memories by looking at pictures and sharing them with my friends.

Use 'memories' plural because 'keep memory' is unidiomatic in English; use gerund phrases 'looking at pictures' and 'sharing them' with correct object pronoun 'them'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'keep memories' and parallel gerunds for clarity.

× Honestly, I preferred rural views because rural areas have rustic jam and give me a sense of tranquility and peaceful.

✓ Honestly, I prefer rural views because rural areas have a rustic charm and give me a sense of tranquility and peace.

The question asks about current preference so present tense 'prefer' is appropriate. 'Preferred' is past. 'Rustic jam' is incorrect; correct word is 'rustic charm'. Also use 'a sense of tranquility and peace' not 'peaceful' (adjective). Suggestion: use present tense for current preferences and correct nouns/adjectives.

× Honestly, I prefer sceneries in my country because this is the place where I was born and I have a spell of feeling to remind me of childhood with another.

✓ Honestly, I prefer the scenery in my country because it is the place where I was born and it gives me a special feeling that reminds me of my childhood.

Use 'the scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenery' rather than 'sceneries'. Use 'it is' instead of 'this is' for natural reference. 'I have a spell of feeling' is incorrect; use 'gives me a special feeling that reminds me of my childhood'. Also use present tense 'prefer' correctly. Suggestion: treat 'scenery' as uncountable and use clear relative clauses.

× With other countries I contemplate.

✓ When I am in other countries, I feel more contemplative.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I contemplate' needs an object or rephrasing. Better to say 'I feel more contemplative' or 'I tend to contemplate more' to express introspection in other countries. Suggestion: provide a complete clause and appropriate verb or adjective to convey meaning.