视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Shorten and clarify the response. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid long, vague clauses and grammatical errors (e.g., "which can also turn towards an inspiration of" is incomplete).

範例: Yes. I enjoy photographing different views because it allows me to express ideas and emotions. For example, I like capturing city skylines at sunset to show contrast between light and architecture, which often inspires my other creative projects.

建議: Remove fillers (umm, uh) and repetition. Give a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then add one clear, specific reason and an example. Use a linking word (because/so) to connect the reason. Avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: I prefer photographing urban areas because they offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, I often photograph historic buildings and busy markets, which provide interesting light and human activity to include in my shots.

建議: Make the answer more precise and finish incomplete phrases. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and an example. Remove hesitation and vague language like "involve in a beautiful situation."

範例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I enjoy exploring different cultures and architectural styles. For example, when I visited Spain I photographed colorful plazas and Gothic cathedrals, which taught me new composition techniques and inspired my portfolio.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views as it is a form of art in which we can express our ideas and by taking pictures we can develop a sense of purpose in our life which can also turn towards an inspiration of.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it is a form of art in which we can express our ideas; taking pictures can also help us develop a sense of purpose in life and become a source of inspiration.

The original sentence is overly long and awkwardly connected, causing sentence structure errors (run-on and unclear phrasing). Break long ideas into clearer clauses, use 'because' for reason, replace 'by taking pictures we can develop' with a concise clause, and avoid 'turn towards an inspiration of' which is ungrammatical. Suggestion: split into two or three clauses and use precise verbs and connectors. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I like taking pictures in urban areas as I feel there are more opportunities and more, umm, attractive places, uh, to capture and, and I feel close, more close to, uh, taking pictures in urban areas as I've always lived, uh, in a city in, in a city.

✓ I like taking pictures in urban areas because I feel there are more opportunities and more attractive places to photograph, and I feel closer to taking pictures in cities since I have always lived in one.

Errors include filler words and incorrect adverb/adjective placement ('more, umm, attractive' and 'feel close, more close to'). Remove fillers, use correct adjective order ('more attractive'), and place adverbs correctly ('closer to taking pictures'). Also simplify repetition ('in a city in, in a city') and use 'since I have always lived in one' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:20

× I prefer views in other countries as I believe it gives us the opportunity to explore the culture and the architecture of of a different country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I believe they give us the opportunity to explore the culture and architecture of a different country.

The phrase 'it gives us' is incorrect because the plural subject 'views' requires 'they give'. This is a subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issue, but primarily the preposition and article use 'of of' is a typo. Also 'in other countries' and 'a different country' mix plural and singular; better to keep plural: 'views in other countries... explore the cultures and architectures of different countries' or use singular consistently. Here corrected to match 'views' with 'they'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Also, I believe by preferring views of a different country, you allow yourself to, uh, involve in a beautiful situation.

✓ Also, I believe that by choosing views of a different country, you allow yourself to be involved in beautiful experiences.

The original uses 'involve' incorrectly; the correct form is 'be involved' (passive participle) or 'get involved in'. This is a pronoun/verb form error: 'allow yourself to involve in' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'allow yourself to be involved in' or 'allow yourself to experience'. Additionally, 'a beautiful situation' is unnatural; 'beautiful experiences' is clearer. Grammar problem type ID:12