视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Expand your answer with a clear topic sentence and at least one supporting detail. Use a complete sentence rather than a single word, and avoid ambiguity by giving a reason or short example. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me remember special places and moods. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach to capture the colors and calm atmosphere.

建議: Correct grammar (use 'I prefer rural areas') and tighten wording. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Keep sentences natural and avoid redundancy.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are more peaceful and less crowded than cities. For example, when I visit the countryside I can relax, enjoy wide open fields and breathe fresh air, which helps me unwind.

建議: Rewrite for clarity and correct word choices. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries'), then give specific, coherent reasons and examples. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect vocabulary. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad allows me to see landscapes that are very different from those at home. For example, I once visited Switzerland and was amazed by the dramatic mountain scenery, which felt completely new compared with the gentle hills near my hometown.

× I'm preferably areas because they are more peaceful and less crowded than city.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are more peaceful and less crowded than the city.

The student used 'preferably' (an adverb) incorrectly instead of the verb 'prefer'. Also 'areas' needs a modifier 'rural' for clarity, and 'city' should include an article 'the' when comparing to 'areas'. Suggestion: use the verb 'prefer' to state preference, include the adjective 'rural' and use 'the city' for the comparison: 'I prefer rural areas because they are more peaceful and less crowded than the city.'

× I enjoy working in the countryside where we can relax, appreciate the open space and breathe fresh air.

✓ I enjoy being in the countryside where we can relax, appreciate the open space, and breathe fresh air.

The phrase 'enjoy working in the countryside' implies employment and may not match intended meaning; 'being in' or 'spending time in' fits better. Also add a comma before 'and' in a list. Suggestion: replace 'working' with 'being' or 'spending time' to match the context of relaxation.

× I'm proper views in other countries because traveling abroad lets me see landscapes and see these kids that are very different from the alcohol files where I enjoy the dramatic mountain scenery, and Switzerland, which very completely new compared with the countryside near my hometown.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad lets me see landscapes and cultures that are very different from those in my country; for example, I enjoy the dramatic mountain scenery in Switzerland, which is completely different compared with the countryside near my hometown.

This sentence has multiple incorrect words and word forms: 'I'm proper views' is wrong—use 'I prefer views'. 'See these kids' and 'alcohol files' are likely incorrect transcriptions; context suggests 'cultures' and 'those in my country'. 'Which very completely new' needs verb 'is' and correct adverb order 'completely different'. Structure is also run-on; splitting and adding punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'I prefer', replace unclear nouns with 'cultures' or 'those in my country', insert 'is' and reorder 'completely different', and break into clearer clauses.