视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid fillers (e.g., “umm”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Improve vocabulary by using precise nouns (e.g., “landscapes,” “sunsets”) and vary adjectives. Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I love photographing different views. For example, my gallery is full of landscapes and sunsets I’ve captured during hikes, and I especially enjoy scenes with natural light because they create dramatic colors and silhouettes.

建議: The answer is contradictory (prefers urban but says into nature) and contains hesitation. Start with a clear direct statement that matches your reason. Use linking words (because, for example) and give specific examples comparing urban and rural scenes to explain your preference. Reduce vague phrases like “something greater.”

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes and quiet countryside. For example, I like rural scenes with rolling hills and forests, whereas urban views often feel busy and lack the peaceful atmosphere I look for.

建議: Good balanced response but make it more concise and use clearer linking words (however, on the other hand). Give one specific reason and one concrete example for each choice. Avoid vague phrasing like “stand in between.”

範例: I’m torn between both. For instance, I enjoy visiting the UK and the US for their historic architecture and varied landscapes; however, I also love the Philippines for its tropical beaches and vibrant coastal scenery.

× If you scroll through my gallery you would see a lot of different umm places and locations that I have taken picture of.

✓ If you scroll through my gallery you will see a lot of different places and locations that I have taken pictures of.

Error: 'would see' is inappropriate for a present real conditional; use 'will see'. Also 'taken picture of' uses wrong noun form and missing preposition placement — 'taken pictures of' is correct because 'taken' is used with the plural noun 'pictures'. Suggestion: use 'will' for likely result in this conditional and pluralize 'picture' to 'pictures' and place 'of' after 'pictures'.

× So I do love capturing sunsets, sceneries, especially those with nature.

✓ So I do love capturing sunsets and scenery, especially those featuring nature.

Error: 'sceneries' is not commonly used in English; the uncountable noun 'scenery' is preferred. Also 'with nature' is awkward — use 'featuring nature' or 'in natural settings'. Suggestion: replace 'sceneries' with 'scenery' and rephrase 'with nature' to 'featuring nature'.

× For me, I would prefer the views in the urban areas.

✓ For me, I prefer views in urban areas.

Error: 'would prefer' and 'the views in the urban areas' are wordy and slightly inconsistent with a general preference. Use simple present 'prefer' for habitual or general preferences. Also omit unnecessary articles: 'views in urban areas' is more natural than 'the views in the urban areas'. Suggestion: use 'prefer' and remove 'the' and pluralize appropriately.

× Uh, because I'm more into nature.

✓ I'm more into nature.

Error: Sentence fragment: 'Because' at the start creates a dependent clause without a main clause. In spoken language this is common, but for grammatical correction remove 'Because' to make an independent sentence. Suggestion: start with 'I'm' or attach to previous sentence: 'I prefer views in urban areas because I'm more into nature.'

× I'm more fascinated by how every single thing I can see is a work of someone or something greater.

✓ I'm more fascinated by how every single thing I can see is the work of someone or something greater.

Error: Missing definite article 'the' before 'work' — 'is the work of' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: insert 'the' to form the standard expression 'the work of someone or something'.

× It's just so beautiful to see every living being.

✓ It's just so beautiful to see every living thing.

Error: 'every living being' is grammatically acceptable but slightly unusual here; 'every living thing' is more idiomatic when referring generally to nature. Suggestion: use 'thing' for natural contexts or keep 'being' if emphasizing sentient life.

× There's where I stand in between because I would love to explore the richness of culture and also the sceneries outside of the country, especially those in the places such as United Kingdom and America.

✓ That's where I stand: I'm torn because I would love to explore the richness of culture and the scenery outside my country, especially in places such as the United Kingdom and the United States.

Errors: 'There's where I stand in between' is ungrammatical — use 'That's where I stand' or 'I'm torn'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect; use uncountable 'scenery'. 'Outside of the country' is wordy; use 'outside my country'. Country names need definite article with 'United Kingdom' and 'United States' and 'America' is better as 'the United States'. Suggestion: rephrase to 'I'm torn because I would love to explore the richness of culture and the scenery outside my country, especially in places such as the United Kingdom and the United States.'

× But I also love the Philippines, especially that it gives a much tropical vibe.

✓ But I also love the Philippines, especially because it gives a very tropical vibe.

Errors: 'especially that' is incorrect connector; use 'especially because' or 'particularly as'. 'Much tropical vibe' is ungrammatical — use 'a very tropical vibe' or 'a strong tropical vibe'. Suggestion: replace 'that' with 'because' and 'much' with 'very' or 'a strong'.