视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and use correct verb forms and articles.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel I photograph landscapes such as mountains and seascapes, because they make me feel relaxed and help me preserve memories. For example, I often capture sunrise over the ocean to remember peaceful mornings.

建議: Give a direct preference, explain one or two clear reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words, and avoid invented words or unclear phrases. Use accurate nouns (skyscrapers, crowds) and complete sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities have striking features like skyscrapers and busy streets. In particular, I enjoy photographing crowds and modern architecture since they show vibrant city life and contrast in shapes and colors.

建議: Answer directly, correct grammar and word choice, and give specific examples of traditional features. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain why familiarity matters to you.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many traditional features and historic sites. For example, I photograph old temples and colorful festivals since these familiar scenes reflect my culture and evoke personal memories.

× I am a cameraman for my families, so that's why I really like taking picture because when I will travel to somewhere I can take about the the the views of mountains are like in the sea, ocean and I feel it's very feel comfortable for me and I can walk down memory lane.

✓ I am a cameraman for my family, so I really like taking pictures because when I travel somewhere I can take photos of views such as mountains, the sea, and the ocean, and I feel very comfortable; it helps me walk down memory lane.

Problems: 'families' should be singular 'family' (incorrect use of pronouns/possessive), 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (singular/plural), 'when I will travel to somewhere' uses incorrect future form and preposition; use simple present for habitual actions 'when I travel somewhere' (future/present tense issue), 'take about the the the views of mountains are like in the sea, ocean' is ungrammatical and has extra words and wrong preposition; correct to 'take photos of views such as mountains, the sea, and the ocean' (sentence structure and preposition), 'I feel it's very feel comfortable' duplicates verbs and uses incorrect adjective/adverb; correct to 'I feel very comfortable' (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs). Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use correct singular/plural forms, use simple present for habitual actions, and remove redundant words.

× For me, I would choose to enjoy the urban areas because there's have a lot of skydroppers and I like to take photo about the crowd people because it's look very luxury and I think very modern life and furthermore I think. Urban artists have a lots of.

✓ For me, I would choose to enjoy urban areas because there are a lot of skyscrapers, and I like to take photos of crowds of people because it looks very luxurious and modern. Furthermore, I think urban artists have a lot to offer.

Problems: 'there's have a lot of' combines contraction and verb incorrectly; use 'there are a lot of' (there be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'skydroppers' is misspelled; correct to 'skyscrapers' (word choice). 'take photo about the crowd people' uses wrong preposition and word order; use 'take photos of crowds of people' (preposition and plural). 'it's look very luxury' wrong verb form and adjective; use 'it looks very luxurious' (third person singular issue and incorrect use of adjectives). 'a lots of' should be 'a lot to offer' or 'lots of' (quantifier). Suggestion: use correct 'there are', plural nouns, 'photos of', and proper adjective 'luxurious'.

× I would like to enjoy the view in my country because, uh, in my country there's have there's a very lots of tradies con traditional features like fall or handle capital.

✓ I would like to enjoy the views in my country because my country has many traditional features, such as festivals and historic landmarks.

Problems: 'there's have there's a very lots of' is ungrammatical; use 'my country has many' (there be/subject-verb agreement). 'tradies con traditional features' appears to be incorrect words; likely 'traditional features' is intended. 'like fall or handle capital' is unclear; interpret as 'festivals and historical landmarks' or 'cultural festivals and capital landmarks'. Suggestion: use 'has many traditional features' and give clear examples like 'festivals' and 'historic landmarks'; use plural 'views' to match context.

× So I would like to take photo of them and I feel it's very familiar to me because the way I want.

✓ So I would like to take photos of them, and I feel they are very familiar to me because they match the things I like.

Problems: 'take photo of them' should be plural 'take photos of them' (singular/plural). 'it's very familiar to me' ambiguous pronoun; better 'they are very familiar to me' referring to the features (incorrect use of pronouns). 'because the way I want' is ungrammatical; clarify intent with 'because they match the things I like' or 'because they are what I prefer' (sentence structure). Suggestion: make pronoun references clear, use plural where appropriate, and finish the clause with a clear reason.