视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, last week I visited Koh Phi Phi and took many photos of the coastline; the light at sunset made the sea look golden. I enjoy capturing nature because it helps me remember the peaceful atmosphere.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'wide open spaces', 'I find modern cities crowded'). Avoid vague statements like 'I think affordable' which are unclear here.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy wide open spaces and quieter surroundings. For example, rural landscapes usually have fields and forests where I can hike; additionally, cities feel crowded and noisy to me, so I don’t relax there.

建議: Answer directly, correct grammar, and give a clear reason with a specific example. Avoid fillers ('um', 'uh') and repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas.

範例: I like both, but I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different landscapes. For instance, Bangkok is very built-up with many high-rise buildings, whereas when I travelled abroad I saw vast coastal cliffs and open countryside that I found more inspiring for photography.

× I prefer taking picture of different worlds, for example the nature views and that.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of different places, for example nature views and so on.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it refers to multiple photos (quantifier/number). 'Worlds' is odd; 'places' fits context. 'The nature views' should be 'nature views' and 'and that' is informal; use 'and so on'. Use plural consistency for meaning. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and avoid vague colloquialisms.

× I have recently to taken at Cay when I go last week and it was wonderful and fascinating to taking picture.

✓ I recently took photos at Khao Yai when I went last week, and it was wonderful and fascinating to take pictures.

Mistakes: 'have recently to taken' mixes perfect and infinitive and wrong participle use. Use simple past 'took' and 'went' to match 'last week' (time-specified past). 'to taking picture' should be 'to take pictures' (infinitive + plural noun). Also corrected place name and 'photos' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use simple past for actions completed at a specific time in the past; use base verb after 'to' and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× I definitely prefer rural areas because of the wide open areas itself.

✓ I definitely prefer rural areas because of the wide-open spaces themselves.

'the wide open areas' is awkward; 'wide-open spaces' is idiomatic. 'itself' is wrong referring to plural 'areas'—use 'themselves' or rephrase. Also avoid repeating 'areas' twice. Suggestion: Use plural/reflexive agreement and choose idiomatic nouns (spaces) to avoid redundancy.

× Moreover, I don't like the environment of the modernized city and I think affordable.

✓ Moreover, I don't like the environment of modern cities, and I don't find them affordable.

'the modernized city' is unnatural; use 'modern cities' (plural). 'I think affordable' lacks object and verb—should be 'I don't find them affordable' or 'they are not affordable.' Maintain subject-verb agreement and clear sentiment. Suggestion: Ensure adjectives modify correct nouns and include verbs when stating opinions about affordability.

× I want to see some kind of nature landscapes.

✓ I want to see natural landscapes.

'some kind of nature landscapes' is ungrammatical and wordy. Use 'natural landscapes' or 'some natural landscapes.' Keep adjective before noun and avoid redundant 'kind of' when not needed. Suggestion: Use concise adjective-noun order: 'natural landscapes' or 'some natural landscapes.'

× I appreciate you both uh, local and international countries, but I prefer the views of other countries because in Thailand there are umm there are few place that are wide and open, especially in Bangkok which is consist of many buildings here.

✓ I appreciate both local and international places, but I prefer the views of other countries because in Thailand there are few places that are wide and open, especially Bangkok, which consists of many buildings.

Multiple issues: 'I appreciate you both' incorrectly uses 'you'; should be 'both'. 'local and international countries' is awkward—'places' is better. 'there are few place' needs plural 'places'. 'which is consist of' is wrong verb form; use 'which consists of' or 'which has many buildings.' Pronoun/reference clarity improved. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns ('both' not 'you both'), match plural forms, and use correct verb forms ('consists of'). Avoid filler words and tighten sentences.